Rules: 10-16 lines, I'll spit first.

Forget this dread-lock//I got his neck-up in a dead-lock///
I squeeze a bit harder and now his head's off///
He must be born without a spine// Yep, he's that soft///
It's like holding guns in Columbine// And now I let off///
Wanna-be Bob Marley// HE's Jamaican// YOU're just fakin'///
I play "Planet Rock"// Shatter your bones to see you "breakin"///
You no "Crazy Legs"// You lazy fag// Better face the facts///
It's more of a suicide attempt when you try to attack//
Hell yeah, you're that wack!///
I get you sentenced for every wack sentence in this court///
Couldn't believe my eyes: Vanilla Ice is a member of my Forum-Board///

Ha ok, I guess you're spitting first. I'll put up my verse ina minute.

Before I even get started here's something I predict -
This battle's one-sided like a mobius strip.
I read your verse, I don't even have to feed, it's a mess
You spit so generic you should be reppin' Payless.
You like "Damn...why these people sleeping on these skills of mine?"
Dude, it's your skills that are asleep - you spit one too many tired punchlines
Mc murder? Nah, MC-all-my-shit-is-recycled is a better fit
You could have Barrry Bonds in your crew and still never have a hit
You could rap for years and years, you still be stuck in obscurity
The only battlerap newbie collecting social security
Don't let that happen dude, take advice from someone you admire
after you lose this battle call it quits son - retire.

Oh, by the way, I'm not jamaican and I never have claimed to be so I don't understand what all that's about.

Bumping for the first vote.

Q. What does an 80-year-old woman taste like?
A. ...Depends.

Ha

^^ now...the Moibus strip needs an explanation dawg...lol

payless line was funny

um...MC...ur HEAD -off line was nice...nothin too original, but you worded it nice...it hit hard

but, vote goes to ARES for having a more complex verse


MC...you did a good job though 4 real...keep doin what ur doing. jus add more of it, and complexity.

Vote: Ares

"^ now...the Moibus strip needs an explanation dawg...lol"

haha, yeah i guess it does. Just google Mobius Strip or look it up in dictionary.com.

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aight umm both of u came type week but dis was aight battle

opener-ar...mc da way u made ya shit ryhme was good but da concept was weak
structure-ar
punchlines-a tie
wordplay-nun
multis-nun
personals-nun
enjoyed-ar...even tho his verse was basic at least he tried da be creative nahmean and mc u started out okay then u got weak both of ya'll need da step up tho

my vote-ar

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Da "SiCKEST ON DiS SiTE" LiNE HaS BEEN USED aGaiNST ME 50 x'S...U DUDES aBUSED iT

Forget this dread-lock//I got his neck-up in a dead-lock///
This is alright. but sux as an opener
I squeeze a bit harder and now his head's off///
He must be born without a spine// Yep, he's that soft///
It's like holding guns in Columbine// And now I let off///
WEAK ASSED PUNCH
Wanna-be Bob Marley// HE's Jamaican// YOU're just fakin'///
I play "Planet Rock"// Shatter your bones to see you "breakin"///
Eh this was weak
You no "Crazy Legs"// You lazy fag// Better face the facts///
It's more of a suicide attempt when you try to attack//
Hell yeah, you're that wack!///
Yuck, mostly filler
I get you sentenced for every wack sentence in this court///
Couldn't believe my eyes: Vanilla Ice is a member of my Forum-Board///
Bad closer


Before I even get started here's something I predict -
This battle's one-sided like a mobius strip.
Hella good opener
I read your verse, I don't even have to feed, it's a mess
You spit so generic you should be reppin' Payless.
Ha ha good punch
You like "Damn...why these people sleeping on these skills of mine?"
Dude, it's your skills that are asleep - you spit one too many tired punchlines
aiight punch
Mc murder? Nah, MC-all-my-shit-is-recycled is a better fit
You could have Barrry Bonds in your crew and still never have a hit
Mediocre punch
You could rap for years and years, you still be stuck in obscurity
The only battlerap newbie collecting social security
Nice punch
Don't let that happen dude, take advice from someone you admire
after you lose this battle call it quits son - retire.
ok closer

aiight the lowdown-
Mc Murder-4.5/10
ares-8/10

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Looking for two more votes so this battle can be over.

ma vote goes to ares, murders verse wud have bin good if it made more sense lol. ares tore it up basically, he sed it himself
vote = ares

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oh hit up ma battle wid blackwell
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=123576

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