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05-23-04, 06:12 PM | #1 | ||||
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Destruction of Faith
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This is another emotion filled and vocab poem i wrote a while ago. Not much imagery at all, because i never used to write with imagery. It's just more into emotion.
Seperation Anxiety fading with the gap between our lost lives I once knew you like i knew myself, but lost you because of stupid emotions Love tears things apart, and leaves them unmended until we can fix them But you don't want to, and i don't blame you With a social distortion as myself, why would you want back in Why have just a problem on your chalkboard during your recess periods Why even care about a drowning man that you won't hear out Questions won't lead anywhere, there is no more trail to walk down Anxious to lose this feeling, But wanting to keep it longer I was left in the middle of nowhere with one choice, and that question you gave me Left me speechless, confused, wanting to find a way back But no matter what i told you, it wouldn't end You brought it up anyway, and thats what destroyed civilization No hatred was brought into this, no vile experiments Just a soaken blade, and a happy face A lost life, and a slipping fate Concious unbearing, Falling from my grave to my happiness
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05-24-04, 10:20 PM | #2 | ||||
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IP: 06D4 9403
up.
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05-24-04, 10:25 PM | #3 | |||
Skadoosh!
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DAMN!!!!
That was deep man!!! I liked it, had some nice lines in it and it all flowed together nice, it all linked together unlike some poetry that jumps topic half way through. but yea, that is a nice drop, props to LoT, u can deliver some nice poetry!! Overall 9/10...VERY NICE INDEED!!! |
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05-25-04, 02:28 PM | #4 | ||||
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IP: 06D4 9403
Thanks... Up
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