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Old 06-02-04, 09:10 PM   #1
Pimpcity
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Unhappy paine

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I holdin back everythin in my heart//
Each thing is startin to slowly tear me apart//
Damn I got it bad like a usher song//
But it feels so right and you believe its wrong//
you Just wantin to be friends//
but I want somethin more, there to the end//
I should tell you everything, end all games//
It's startin to hurt more i can't controll my paine//
Feel like screemin its drivin me insane//
I hope you see both our gain//
Yo I'm screemin for help//
but no one hears me no matter how loud I yell//
Glazin over lookin like a cage animal//
Catchin feelin I didn't know this was something i couldn't handle//


Yo I need feed back and advice holla at da kid.
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Old 06-02-04, 09:30 PM   #2
HoPPa
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I know i aint all that good yet either, but you gotz to get a new style, and use a better vocabulary, nobody really wants to hear you cryn about sumthin in your rhyme the whole time. No hate tho, just keep write'n, im out peace/
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Old 06-03-04, 09:34 AM   #3
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i wasnt feelin it foreal u kids need to elevate be4 u come into here iight...........................
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