Gimme some feedback, please...

I've got da kinda flows dat could break your nose,
Make ya pass out n go into co~matose,
My analysis is dat your so prang of my dope
Slang, when i flow you can't move it's like paralysis,
Yo...my flows blow da track like explosives,
Burnin to centre of your mind like corrosives,
WOAH!I beg someone hold me back for a second, cos i
Think i need to calm down before i start wreckin, yo
Every day a next fake claims dat he wrecks, then i
Lyrically destroy them like Semtex,
BOOM!Who's next, but step at own risk, now i
Hear dem try n use my flows,tsk,tsk!!
Nigga tried to bite my rhymes like a rottweiler,
Like I wouldn't even recognise my own style, huh
If you bite don't try n talk like you're top! Yo he
Got clocked so quick i saw his jaw drop to da
Floor, besides dat you know da score,
Fuck around wid me i'll lyrically declare war,
Leavin all my enemies sprawlin by da masses,
Chokin up my foes like toxic gases

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yo that was pretty.
all u gotta do is keep posting and your gonna elavate.

keep doin what u doin~

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not to bad at all and u still kinda a rookie so that makes it even better keep it comin iight....

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