Eloquence might hurt you, your simple speech is desired/
Bold faced like Osama hinding in caves and still wont fire/
A gun, the rhymes that i slung, you sweat and perspire/
Cuz its like cats verses dogs, logically knowing the outcome/
busting out from nut is face in the front is the in-cum/
Face breaks, acid spit, hydrdochloric complies with my intense/
Future is present, choclate covered stawberrys is my incense/
try to break that 300 pounds is the limit, but you wont/
Overboard is notified as a failure, Bad Boy is to "LA-Familia"/
Horoscopes a tella, of lies, but who wins a fella who tries/
to look in eyes, decypher every word, then eat it up like pies/
its the kinda world we livin in, things ranned by computer-- well/
Gays livin it up, pass girls/boys to Get with "DELL"/ (Computer Brand)
impromper hygiene, bad health, equals to bad smell/ OH Hell
but insist stank puss will pass like a word with a incorrect spell/
Speaking directly to all who had sex incorrectly/
black girls white girls and all who in between serve and protect thee/
you prolly think i'm a medical advisor, ya mistaken, a learner in anatomy/
shit get at me, if youre wrong you off like tyson out of the ring-- i am Gladly/
to take away ya title/
leaving you dissed like a contestant on "American IDol"

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that was hot specially for a rook i was def feelin it u got major potential keep it comin iight...

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thanks i'm jus gettin started(with text)

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what else critique me

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it was hot u workin wit sumthin there keep da gangsta shit cummin hard at dez bitches who r fake on here

keep cummin hard & full force ahead let em have it

nice shit rp...keep it up

thanks

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that was pretty tight man i liked it o yeah can u go drop a vote on my battle wit flagrantfoul i forgot to get tha link peace

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wow that was nice son, nice punches wordplay basically everything was on fire
you gonna make a name for yourself in this site ya heard.

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man all i can say is ILL or TIGHT

Straight shit homie. Try droppin more multies with them punches tho`

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Thanks for all positive criticism

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yo that was nice realll shit was hot . wordplay was fuckin nice . can ya read my shit . on , i dont care what yall say, keep it up . i got R.o.d a fourm to on here

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