What happens when I Die? Is Death the end of me?
Or do I continue in some other place or state of being
My heart was of an Armed force. I’m down to my last corporate
Would I go to a place of everlasting reward or eternal torment?
Am I destined to be reincarnated? Or will I forever be lost
Coming to life again in a different body, Mind state then before
In Essence I’m gone, alone in a world that perished its form
As if this black book can give me the answer I’ve searched for
Pressure folded me, but I know no one can endure its weight
Where’s life’s tool? And so I pick up carpentry to build up my strength
Cause you are I, as I am you. You’re the one I’ve so longed
And so I embark on this journey that’ I’ve known that’s so wrong
My family warned. Yet to no avail I ignored in triumph
Now I’m left with this pain that’s stuck deep inside of
I react differently when I’m around others.
I guess its because i'm no longer “Chasing Heaven”

i think you could really work on this peace and make it alot better cause alot of what you said sounds forced and therefore dosent make scense but its a nice message and if i was you i would really try to make this better because i think you could do alot with the chasing hevean idea