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06-24-04, 04:53 AM | #1 | |||||||
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YO TIME IS UP NIGGA.... THIS ONE IS OFFICIAL... NO ONE GIVES A FUCK SO LET ME HAND YOU A TISSUE..DEAR JOHN LETTER CAUSE YO PEOPLE SAY THEY MISS YOU. IF YOU GOT AN ISSUE THEN WE CAN BRING IT 2 PISTOLS... ME IM READY FOR THE DRAMA READY AS I CAN BE FAR AS I CAN SEE SHORTY SAY SHE COMIN WIT ME.. IF YOU GOT BEEF THEN WE CAN TAKE IT TO THE STREETS.. IM TRYN 2 HUSTLE IN THIS GAME SO MY SEEDS CAN EAT..YOU MIGHT BE HUNGRY NIGGA BUT YOU AINT AS HUNGRY AS ME ..THURSTY AS ME.. BUT YOU STILL LOOK PHONEY TO ME... IM THE CREAM OF THE CROP LIKE FINE COKE I RISE 2 THE TOP..CAPTAIN OF THIS SHIP ..WHOLE PLANETS I ROCK..I SERVE ROCKS AVOID SPOTS THAT STAY HOT.. PUT 5 SLUGS IN YO ASS LIKE THE LEGENDARY 2PAC
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06-24-04, 04:54 AM | #2 | |||||||
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Tell A Nicca What Yall Think And Bring Ya A Game!!
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06-24-04, 05:28 AM | #3 | ||||
Odi et Amo
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Didn't like your structure,concept was nice, vocab was basic but straight to the point (why did you have to use caps?). Emotion was pretty good but could use some work. Flow was tight. Not really my style but i liked it tho!
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06-24-04, 05:40 AM | #4 | |||||||
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Its Okay For Trina!!
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06-24-04, 07:52 AM | #5 | ||||||
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eh i thought it was good, could do with some improving tho, you structure and flow needs working on i liked the whole subject but when i read it i felt like some where in there you lost what you where righting about. still good tho keep um coming
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06-25-04, 02:52 PM | #6 | |||||
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nice rythm, kept ya shit real, nice drop bra
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06-25-04, 03:21 PM | #7 | ||||||
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whassup nova
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