ok this is really quik..bout 20 mins off top......

lemme strugle for a minute as i start to envisage
homeless at thirteen,life gave me this privelage
as i child i woz beat,soul scratched by ma uncle pete
takin outside,thrown.......left on the scrapheap
rap became ma only way to put play into life
only means i had to speak about the torturing knife
my mind has aborted,abruptly...blinded by gluttony
i cant see through the clouds,they all above me
surrounded by pain..mesmorizing....drive me insane
i stand lifeless in the rain...fellin like i bin slain.....

*hook*
throw water on me.....i wnt go out easy
throw flames on me....i wnt go out easy
throw threats to me... i respond super swiftly
throw vipers on me.....my venom 2 sickly......

nxt verse gonna hit wit a twist..helter skelter
fuck wit me ur life hit n miss...card i delt-ya
ima rise to take u down...acidically melt-ya
brain lost,hands tied but still daddys belt-ya
u cudnt knock me out tha ring if u was tha welter (boxin)
i take u to africa, tie u up n legally pelt-ya

i play u off the park as if i woz fukin celta (spanish football team)


uppin sum feedback

thats awesome man, the hooks great. Nice goin

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Poetry Contest! Drop your Verses

yo dat shit was tight... ... keep yo head man yo shit is nicely elevated.. i like de way u use yo vocab..

uppin sum feed back on dis freestyle shit........................................

dawg thats why we got you in the crew homie real nice job we look for talent not recordz or veterans just str8 talent keep representin D2R to the fullest

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