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ok. I'm checked in sorry it took a bit. lets get started

Bitch...

sum one help this bitch, she's lost. she needs a net guide-
tryna walk in my world? your like your avi. Outside-
Trick don't make me cry....I'll leave your organ's out dried.
Thinkin you win....right...girl you must be watchin Sci-fi-
Or countin dick-ride's...You thinkin your name sounds tight..
Harmfull not quite....not even your cunt put's up a fight-
Aint that right? ur come'in late, jus like your check in-
If I can re-ckon. your words like your rapperz' no weapon-
Last bar to rip you. I'll make it quite hospitable....
I'll lay u out like Son of Sam. An make your status critical-

Next...

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Malefic you aint gonna win
You couldnt spit for shit if you was a stupid kid chewin tobacco
I'll leave your ass pointing home like the extraterrestrial(ET)
you just wanna go home cuz im in control
Im a murderous verbalist my words are like fists
so I insist you dont mess wit me
cuz I'll smoke your ass like rolled weed
have you bowing to my knees like the mad cow disease
Bitch its over, please.

Uppin' for some votes on this battle....................

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that was some ill shit from you both but i think the new girl took that one

WARNING: this vote is not a reflection of how good you are
...but a reflection of how good you were to the other battle

Malefic- nice opener 7/10


good r/s and w/p 6/10


gettin a little personal good flow so far 7/10


little personal 6/10


good closer vocab w/p 7/10



Inimical Female-
not a very good opener short 1st stretch 2nd bad w/p 3/10


this was a good atempt at a punch bad w/p 4/10


this was ok w/p pitty this lines out here by itself 3/10


this was ok rhyming but it could be set up a bit better 4/10



overall- malefic... you had a better rhyme scheme and more consistent flow
...good battle

vote- malefic

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good lookin. uppin (1)

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Uppin 2.

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Malefic I was feeling your style man, you had some nice personals, good flow and structure. The one about dick-ride that was syck, had a double meaning on it. Even was some multis in the verse, I was really feelin it.

Inimical - Your structure was all over the place, which usually hurts your flow, sometimes the structure can be off but syllables are on and flow is good. I just wasnt seeing either one, you did use a few multis in a couple lines, but they werent hittin for anything. Your punches just werent there, come harder next time.

v/Malefic

Thanks Alot. Uppin 3.

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it doesnt say no crew votes so because im bored imma drop an honest vote

sum one help this bitch, she's lost. she needs a net guide-
tryna walk in my world? your like your avi. Outside-
ok punch....this shit was pretty good 7/10
Trick don't make me cry....I'll leave your organ's out dried.
Thinkin you win....right...girl you must be watchin Sci-fi-
this shit was good..second line was decent 7.5/10
Or countin dick-ride's...You thinkin your name sounds tight..
Harmfull not quite....not even your cunt put's up a fight-
lollllllllll at the second line 8/10
Aint that right? ur come'in late, jus like your check in-
If I can re-ckon. your words like your rapperz' no weapon-
this was a fuckin ill line..nice 8.5/10
Last bar to rip you. I'll make it quite hospitable....
I'll lay u out like Son of Sam. An make your status critical-
shit was aiight not too good for acloser but decent 7/10

inimical female
Malefic you aint gonna win
You couldnt spit for shit if you was a stupid kid chewin tobacco
was that sapost to rhyme..cause it didnt /// 6/10
I'll leave your ass pointing home like the extraterrestrial(ET)
you just wanna go home cuz im in control
....nope... 6/10
Im a murderous verbalist my words are like fists
so I insist you dont mess wit me
doesnt rhyme...eww 5/10
cuz I'll smoke your ass like rolled weed
have you bowing to my knees like the mad cow disease
Bitch its over, please.
nopppppppppe this does not make sense 5.5/10


lol this was one sided.. vote: malefic

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Malefic Won that battle cuz... I liked the rhyme scheme and there was better structure in his/her verse... some of the punches were cool too.
as for inmical female.. the structure, punchlines and rhyme scheme can be better....

V/ MALEFIC

Hit me up with a vote on my battle, will you?
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=132932