ok you know the rules, house rules any way.

10 lines max, you post within 10 mins after me, if not then will class as no show.. good luck

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ok this is it, your going to get merked smokescreen,
notice his age is undisclosed, it's because he's thirteen,
this guy gets his name of poke'mon what a fool,
he's a choke artist, someone send him to rap school,
plus one to your beaten record, that makes it two,
i don't know why your on this site, you still wear baby shoes,
your probably a white boy with a laptop, thinkin you a thug,
while your mum, is in the kitchen popping prescription drugs,
slimey and smell imma squash this guy like a slug,
his laptop has broken down, ive just pulled the plug,

NOTE: where it says "smell"it's ment to say "small" sorry for the spellin.

Like Raiden, I’m sendin’ you “flows” of an electricity shock
Scriptive wouldn’t be a “Icon” if you was on a computer “desk~top
You covered in blackness “Script” you lack the realness so practice
In-fact-this nigga excels in one skill and that’s wackness
Scriptive battles SMOKE dogg what the hell are you thinkin’
You couldn’t “Navigate” a win if you was drivin’ a “Lincoln”
Don’t you know that stealin is wrong you’ll be locked up doing some time
If you did then why you stealin Eminem’s mom’s prescription drug lines
I’ll put a stop to you like a period at the end of a phrase
You’ll think its “The Day After Tomorrow” when you get hit wit this wave

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damn that was good aight upppin lets ge this over with

smokescreen got this one he seeemed to have come harder he got it with the
eminem line but yo scriptive i wanna battle you

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Scriptive
ok this is it, your going to get merked smokescreen,
notice his age is undisclosed, it's because he's thirteen,
-not a good personal
this guy gets his name of poke'mon what a fool,
he's a choke artist, someone send him to rap school,
-bad punch
plus one to your beaten record, that makes it two,
i don't know why your on this site, you still wear baby shoes,
-if hes 13 how is he wearin baby shoes
your probably a white boy with a laptop, thinkin you a thug,
while your mum, is in the kitchen popping prescription drugs,
-whats wrong wit a laptop and the last line is played
slimey and smell imma squash this guy like a slug,
his laptop has broken down, ive just pulled the plug,
-really bad punch not all cats squash slugs

Smokescreen
Like Raiden, I’m sendin’ you “flows” of an electricity shock
Scriptive wouldn’t be a “Icon” if you was on a computer “desk~top
-that was pretty good punch
You covered in blackness “Script” you lack the realness so practice
In-fact-this nigga excels in one skill and that’s wackness
-need to word it better
Scriptive battles SMOKE dogg what the hell are you thinkin’
You couldn’t “Navigate” a win if you was drivin’ a “Lincoln”
-bad punch
Don’t you know that stealin is wrong you’ll be locked up doing some time
If you did then why you stealin Eminem’s mom’s prescription drug lines
-good personal
I’ll put a stop to you like a period at the end of a phrase
You’ll think its “The Day After Tomorrow” when you get hit wit this wave
-not a good punch

overall smokescreen won this for better structure,sense,punches and better personal
vote-Smokescreen

Scriptive battles SMOKE dogg what the hell are you thinkin’
You couldn’t “Navigate” a win if you was drivin’ a “Lincoln”

Made me laught vote Smoke for better punches
and a less stretched verse

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smoke screen came with better punchlines
n scriptives werent that shit hot n was pretty childish felt smokescreens more
vote/ smokescreen

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smokescreen took this cuz of punches
thats wut wins battles

vote=$mokeskreen

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