usual rules
10 lines max
u go 1st

LD=LockDown
His Signature is fucking long


im coming for the win this is gunna be all a blur..
.....................................i'm already lost
cuz im scrolling a half page down his signature...
this herb thought i was new so he accepted to battle..
.......................................i was 11-3 on orginal
thinkin hes ghetto wit Tupac, redneck raisin cattle....
im spittin first so this herb cant feed anything off my verse
...............................................whe n this kid spits
.....................he'll have Elvis Presley rollin in his herse
youve got 10 lines to spit something better that your "king"...

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lmfao at your verse, aight am a spit sumthang giv me time

This cat need ta get wid the present cos he stuck in the past
dont mean ta make u cry but the worse game console is the dreamcast
Am a cast ma self in ur dreams n kill u wid this beat
like freddy changed his name ta young-thug on r.b street
This aint topical but we all feel sorry fo ya at this time
cos ur structures wack n u aint even used one punchline
am a leave u naked n revealed for all ta see
leave ur flows cut apart like a gave u open hart surgery
Your verse is wack u couldnt shine wid a thousand candles
u just wack tryna slit ur wrist wit knife handles

he spitt so wack i took a couple of minutes to spitt a lil shit somethan

uppin..................................upppin..... ...........

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Young = played meta's n decent punches(played). flow was iight and structure was decent- overrall weak but okay, no personals tho(not much)

Meta = your punches were blah but they werent played like young's, had better personals, flow and structure was off, but had better meta's.no multi's so basically it came down to wordplay which i think u had a lil ..

vote = meta

go drop an HONEST vote

if dont kno wat ur votin about dont

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Meta- your flow and structure had me fucked up...but I understood it. You really didn't have any punches and no multi's. All of those dots gotta go. what are they for?

Young- your flow was easier to read. You had some punches but they didn't hit that hard. personnals were slim, and no multi's were used by you either. Basically you had more punches even tho they didn't hit very hard and that's what got it for you.

vote Young

Honest Vote

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READY FOR WAR

CHECK THIS OUT IN OPEN MIC...NEED FEEDBACK
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=135097

LETS GO!!!!!!!!!!

Shoulda put a 150+ Posts here also..

IM NOT SWAYING VOTES

But kid I WHored you.

My Structure=better then his.

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okay

Structure, MEtas, Punches, and Personals= MEta

he came stronger....and had hard hitten punches......pz

v/meta

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation.

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last uppin... hit it up............................

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my bad.. last up........................................

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this might just b because am a newbie but i didnt feel metaz structure i couldnt understand his style at all he was all over the place n i aint feeling the ................. before the next line
only thing that won was structure n flow

v - thug

im coming for the win this is gunna be all a blur..
.....................................i'm already lost
cuz im scrolling a half page down his signature...
^weak personal...cudve had beta setup
this herb thought i was new so he accepted to battle..
.......................................i was 11-3 on orginal
thinkin hes ghetto wit Tupac, redneck raisin cattle....
^wack...2nd line is herbish...it dnt make sense
im spittin first so this herb cant feed anything off my verse
...............................................whe n this kid spits
.....................he'll have Elvis Presley rollin in his herse
^herse lines real played..also it didnt make sense..
if u spit first..surely he can feed??


This cat need ta get wid the present cos he stuck in the past
dont mean ta make u cry but the worse game console is the dreamcast
^at first i woz like wtf?..but yeh that woz aiight rippin on dreamcast
Am a cast ma self in ur dreams n kill u wid this beat
like freddy changed his name ta young-thug on r.b street
^hmm not feelin this...ok concept though
This aint topical but we all feel sorry fo ya at this time
cos ur structures wack n u aint even used one punchline
^wack...but it is personal and true..so yeh its aiight
am a leave u naked n revealed for all ta see
leave ur flows cut apart like a gave u open hart surgery
^played
Your verse is wack u couldnt shine wid a thousand candles
u just wack tryna slit ur wrist wit knife handles
^ok closer

overall vote young thug,harder punches

meta tryed to make his look gud wit structure but his punches sucked bad

vote-thug