Aight dawg..

12-14 lines
No crew/hate/dr votes.
Blind spit within 20 minutes
No feeding

Good luck..

check.. I just finished.. you almost done? should I post up?

when this battle iz over vote on Da prodigy vs slugga and Da prodigy vs mixedtoxinz and i'll vote on yours

Aight bro.. it's been over 20 minutes.. I'm postin.. hopefully your almost done.. but like I told ya in PM.. I only called ya out cuz I think we're 2 of the hottest rooks on the site.. I'm tired of wastin lyrics on scrubs.. Much respect to ya.. But you die now..

Aight..
Look..

Acceptin my challenge was a mistake.. only Sparkin a Flame
but Da Truth is I got Two Nines.. Bullets Marked wit Ya Name
Herb's too busy Complainin' .. Claimin' his Wackness is Fake
Roll wit me.. hit the ground harder than'a Fat Bitch on Skates
Poor kid dreams about beatin' me.. stuck in a Foolish Vision
When my punches'll bend ya farther over than Ja Rule in Prison
You never explain your votes, but ya always Askin for Favors
and ya rap's cold as Ice Cream.. plus it's Lackin the Flavors
Your style is awful.. couldn't beat me if I Handed you My Lines
so go'head n tell em your name.. how you Ran-from-me FIVE Times
now Grab a Clover cuz the Battle's Over.. this he Clearly Knows
Kid's bout to get filled wit more holes than a Bowl of Cheerios
I peeped your previous posts n' poems.. a Lot of em are Boring
Now watch the voters Trash your Verse like the Bottom of a 40


If anybody has any problems understanding a specific personal or punch, ask me.. the "go'head tell em your name" = "tell em 'the truth'" .. I think that's the only one that could get confusing..

Good luck dawg

one~

Check it,

Yo flow is Pork Rine, I demolish Your Kind in Four Lines
Only reason yo record's 4-0's coz u battled the same spaz 4 times
I spit acid, while you get dipped In It Like A Nacho
In any rap race i'll leave this nigga Winded Like Chicago
I'll roast you faster than time it's self, make u "Live In The Past"
The only reason you got "Stypes" is coz i be "Whippin Yo Ass"
I'll Piss In A Glass and chase it with stricnine to Kill U
Even if u were decent, i'd cut my nerves so I won't "Feel U"
He talks out his ass, I should give em shit to Feed His Asshole
N I read yo basic rhyme scheme, i'll tell Dr. Suess U Need A BAttle
Behead His Type, between the lines I'll give u dem Redish "Strypes"
(Blood)
U lost coz U underestimated, u can't "sleep on me", like a Bed Of Spikes
But as I said I'll continue to reign, slay u ass they All Watch ME
Take yo fuckin heart out like it was a part of an Autopsy....

MEant to say.. "And i'll take yo fuckin heart out like it was part of an Autopsy"

if that would make it sound a little better, flow wise..

but nice battle cuzo... votes now please

vote on da prodigy vs slugga and da prodigy vs mixed toxinz and i'll return the favor

Da prodigy, ya'll gotta stop freepostin if you're not gonna vote.. for real

That vote doesn't count dawg.. if you expect us to return your favor, you gotta explain your shit and poll it.. appreciate the vote, but you gotta do it right for it to count..

uppin' for votes.. quit sleepin' folks..

This battle was a close battle i think strype won though

BREAKDOWN
Strype- your personals in this battle were killin it one whole line just smashed his name and that was tha highlight of your verse (to me)"but Da Truth is I got Two Nines.. Bullets Marked wit Ya Name and so go'head n tell em your name.. how you Ran-from-me FIVE Times" pesonals were hott your punches hit hard as well i like tha ja rule punch overall ya verse was on point 7/10

datruth29-wanst feelin ya opener all that much but your second line made up for it hella lot "tha same spaz four times" LOL "He talks out his ass, I should give em shit to Feed His Asshole N I read yo basic rhyme scheme, i'll tell Dr. Suess U Need A BAttle" nice punch prolly one of tha best in your verse the rest werent as stopng as strypes but u tried to come hard

both-should use more word play and multies yall structure was both allright and both floed well but

vote-Strype

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ok... upping this shit, more honest votes

-Strype-
Acceptin my challenge was a mistake.. only Sparkin a Flame
but Da Truth is I got Two Nines.. Bullets Marked wit Ya Name
^weak play off of his name to be honest...atleast u played off of his name tho...

Herb's too busy Complainin' .. Claimin' his Wackness is Fake
Roll wit me.. hit the ground harder than'a Fat Bitch on Skates
^heh...concept is played like hell tho...fat ppl-ground hard jokes...

Poor kid dreams about beatin' me.. stuck in a Foolish Vision
When my punches'll bend ya farther over than Ja Rule in Prison
^nah...

You never explain your votes, but ya always Askin for Favors
and ya rap's cold as Ice Cream.. plus it's Lackin the Flavors
^weak metaphor...played concept

Your style is awful.. couldn't beat me if I Handed you My Lines
so go'head n tell em your name.. how you Ran-from-me FIVE Times
^if it's true...nice personal...

now Grab a Clover cuz the Battle's Over.. this he Clearly Knows
Kid's bout to get filled wit more holes than a Bowl of Cheerios
^played...

I peeped your previous posts n' poems.. a Lot of em are Boring
Now watch the voters Trash your Verse like the Bottom of a 40
^meh...


Datruth29:
Yo flow is Pork Rine, I demolish Your Kind in Four Lines
Only reason yo record's 4-0's coz u battled the same spaz 4 times
^it isn't even true...

I spit acid, while you get dipped In It Like A Nacho
In any rap race i'll leave this nigga Winded Like Chicago
^1st line...metaphor is weak...winded~chicage...u gotta think harder man

I'll roast you faster than time it's self, make u "Live In The Past"
The only reason you got "Stypes" is coz i be "Whippin Yo Ass"
^meh...atleast u played off his name..gettin sumwhere

I'll Piss In A Glass and chase it with stricnine to Kill U
Even if u were decent, i'd cut my nerves so I won't "Feel U"
^your basically saying your a hater...concept was nice...if u worded it right, could of been a good punch.

He talks out his ass, I should give em shit to Feed His Asshole
N I read yo basic rhyme scheme, i'll tell Dr. Suess U Need A BAttle
^yours is pretty basic too

Behead His Type, between the lines I'll give u dem Redish "Strypes"
(Blood)
U lost coz U underestimated, u can't "sleep on me", like a Bed Of Spikes
^weak metaphor...

But as I said I'll continue to reign, slay u ass they All Watch ME
Take yo fuckin heart out like it was a part of an Autopsy....
^another weak metaphor...

Overall:...This would of been a good battle if it was a live freestyle, but ur typin shit...u can word things better...and come out with better concepts. Overall...I think that -Strype- won tho...he had played concepts...but they still were more effective than truth's weak metaphors.

Givin ya'll some real feedback. Take it any way you like, just tryin to help. Return the favour with honest votes plz.

http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=135899
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=135882


pz out. God Bless.

- T-West.

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^I wasn't really trying that hard.. but my metaphores were weak compared to what, your verses? naw