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07-20-04, 12:42 PM
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"Beyond The Bullit"
IP: A001 97D8
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Look Above And Below The Two Surfaces... Sky The Ground, Three Pushes Seaze Their Own Two Purposes... To Bring My Fall Like Autum Folliage... And Answer All Questions Beyond The Bullit... My Last Short Breath Takes All The Evil That I've Placed In... And I Grasp Every Thought That Flickers Through My Arrangement... But The Only Old Thing To Keep Rewinding Over Again... Is The Lingering Question Of What Lies Beyond The Bullit... [[Verse 1]] Strong Aims Soley Point Out This Doubt Leaving My Only Voice Out To The Heavans Slowly Toyed... Thoughts Played, In Lonely Voids Seaming Moist From So Many Questions Like "Los Lonley Boys"... Bullits Folden Faith While I Hold This Open Place To Pull This Visual Aid From Memories Of Golden Gates... Still With Molded Paint Like Still Clips, Bold N' Faint All In One Image Of A Holesom Place Away From Colts N' Hate... Storybook Atmospheres Apear In All Glory So I Recall, Ordinary Sucsess Stories And Look Past All Worry... GOD SAVE ME!!!... As Weary Took Me, Collapsed These Years, So Sorry As My Faith Crumbled With Gods History Wrapped In My Tears Quary... [[Chorus]] Bullits, Jesus... God This, Childs Dreams Aren't Breathing... AAAAAAAAAAAAAAHH!!!... Stop It, Please Jesus... My Ispirations Dead Just Contemplating These Thoughts... Devistation Spawns As Brilliance Is Just Another, Senclessly Caught... AAAAAAAAAAAAAAHH!!!... These Webs Of The World Wide... Entrance All Times Of The Young Mind... AAAAAAAAAAAAAAHH!!!... Kids Just Looking For There Out Of The Cold Wind... But Only Find That Wich Lies Beyond The Bullit... [[Verse 2]] Every Droplet Severs Prophets And Harps, Angels, STOP IT! Wings Fall, Breaking My Heart... Cloud Nine Met Its Minus, Three Kings Cheeper Starts Sureneties Birth At Six Feet Darker Then Previous Creations Of Art... Once Apon A Challenged Youth I Spun My Lies In Truth And Had My Beliefs Crushed By Maliced Crews... Learned To Huss-le And Use Others Trust To Bust My Feet Threw The Doors Of Out Lived Tunes... I Used To Picture God With Her Pure White Robe, Wish Ya Could Have Grown Out Of More Then Smoke And Light Shows... Saw White Rows Of Clouds Out Among Miles Of Bright Flows Of Gods Power In More Then A Pine Cone... [[Chorus]] Bullits, Jesus... God This, Childs Dreams Aren't Breathing... AAAAAAAAAAAAAAHH!!!... Stop It, Please Jesus... My Ispirations Dead Just Contemplating These Thoughts... Devistation Spawns As Brilliance Is Just Another, Senclessly Caught... AAAAAAAAAAAAAAHH!!!... These Webs Of The World Wide... Entrance All Times Of The Young Mind... AAAAAAAAAAAAAAHH!!!... Kids Just Looking For There Out Of The Cold Wind... But Only Find That Wich Lies Beyond The Bullit... [[Verse 3]] Clouds Scortched The Sky While It Still Lurred The Mind With Its Pressance Of Times Exile... A Place Where Tourches Of Fire Play With Eyes Switching Its Shade Every Bit Of Time They Find... Blue Glazed Scenes, Music Plays, Pictures Of Surene Yet Foolish Days... Every Tune Tamed By This "Coolwhiped" Place Sits Light-ly Pleased On My Useless Brain... God If Only This, Folliage Of Soulful Aid Were Not Just Only An Old Dreams Limb... To Cruch And Prop The Only Holy Village That Could Keep God's Unholy Pillaged... I JUST DONT KNOW WHAT TO BELIEVE!!! 14 Years Of Stray Beliefs Under Gunblaze As A Hollow Grave Is Shurley Gunnin For Last Game... Lives Played With Mine The Same, Time Has Came And Past, So Remember Me By This One Last Phraze... You Wanna Grasp Fate With All Great-ness Then Ask Always With No Hesitate, God What Is Beyond The Last Day... [[Goodnight]] Regretfully Finding Answers... As I Dance Around These Cancers... Damp Shirts And Lands Burned... As The Youth Of The World Utters Their Last Words... |
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07-20-04, 01:14 PM
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IP: 0F9E 620B
Ahhhh...Yes...Nice Piece....I Like The Action That You Put Into It...You Can Write Visually...I Could Picture That Ish In My Mind...Your Vocab Is Excellent...Some Of The Best I Have Seen In A While...W/P...Great...Overall It Was Fantastic...Good Job...You Gotta Read It And Think And Visualize Every Line To Understand It....
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07-20-04, 02:15 PM
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Banned: Biting
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IP: B90F 540D
Fiyah Piece Fam!
great great vocab...u really do create a lot of imagery...this was a great concept and u nailed it...props keep at it homie |
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07-20-04, 02:36 PM
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IP: A001 97D8
Well This Was Actually A Piece From A Topical Battle...
But I Just Took It And Broke It Up Alil And Added Chorus And A Hook... Thanx Alot For Your Feedback... And If Your Really Feeling My Style And This Rhym... Drop Me A Vote For Rookie Of The Month... And Drop A Vote For This Rhym As Open Mic Of July... Thanks Alot... Upping... ~One~ |
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07-20-04, 03:02 PM
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New to RB
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IP: 0F9E 620B
Wanna Collab ?...You Can Pick The Topic...
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07-20-04, 03:05 PM
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IP: C225 207B
yo I felt the 2nd and 3rd verse the most man..keep those emotions and flames goin fam...
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07-20-04, 03:18 PM
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RV SPOTLIGHT, GET AT ME!
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IP: AA51 3382
Nice drop, good imagery, nice vocab. uppin for open mic of the month.
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07-20-04, 03:20 PM
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1926
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IP: A001 97D8
Thanx Mayn...
And Ayo Internal, I'm Down For That... Gimmy A Shout Threw PM And We'll Figure Out What We're Gonna Do... Or If You Got AIM Get Me... Brownnumber18 <<< My AIM Screen Name... ~One~ |
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07-20-04, 03:33 PM
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bingo!
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IP: AAF4 20CB
straight fire..nice job..good vocab..lines were a lil stretched but its all good..overall 8.6/10
open mic of the month
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07-20-04, 05:47 PM
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Ill Nigga Alert.
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IP: 3240 794D
Shhhhitt........Nice drop ..........damn........Seriously.....This gotta be the best open mic of July so far fa reel........Nice drop......Keep up tha good work ....8/10
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07-20-04, 07:58 PM
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IP: 8E70 C31B
nice drop! dope vocab, was feelin the flow, ^^most def best topical of july
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07-20-04, 08:36 PM
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New Jack
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IP: FDD6 AE15
whoa, ya vocab off da hook playah, keep spittin ya fiyah, can't see none of dese niggaz makin ya retire.....
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07-20-04, 08:54 PM
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Spiritual Respiration
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IP: 3CF2 7138
yea i liked it even though it was against me. but its all cool. I'd vote it for open mic of the month, but that right there is just a part of one of the best topical battles of the month
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07-21-04, 02:23 AM
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IP: 0F9E 620B
Yo Atticus...I Sent You A Pm...
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07-21-04, 09:43 AM
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1926
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IP: A001 97D8
Upping This...
Thanx For The Love People... ~One~ |
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