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No Crew Votes
No Recycling
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Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 09-18-04 at 02:47 AM

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£ÉgÉÑdÄr¥ M¤É has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-18-04 12:49 AM.

BANG has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-18-04 12:49 AM.

Yea nigga Lets Go

Why is this cat afraid of this
Hit him so hard last time- he created a new Allias/
Cats like you be the reason why Im hated by many
or its just you thinkin you many or you drunk of that Henny
and any body esle wit you just make sure they aint wit you when this Louisville hit you and it dont discriminate-They get hit too/
Either that or a Punchline any cat trying to take mine
Only way you gettin this shit is if you have a whole Frontline
And im not thinking bout RV this is War nigga
fuckin wit me get you Bitchslapped Like a whore nigga
Because before you it was nothing - I played it easy
Now you talk greezy- But you aint know all that back talk feed me/ Now that leads me- wit some hot shit believe me
All that yip yapin you saying is nothing dont tease me
You watch me fuck ya moms everyday -while Jerry Springer on TV/
And that crew you roll wit can quit ya schemin act
when I catch fire I'll murder them like TS- Leaning Back
and Im down with that - so accept the fact you trash
So you can chill while you take a picture kissin my ass
Bitch

8 losses and 3 wins,thats almost like a sin,
who r u?get off my dick,"jump off" like lil kim,
if u really a gangsta than sign offline,make ya block hot!,
do it for pac!,shoot at the cops!,ure so cool.........NOT!,
ya faker than pamelas breast,stop reppin the west!
ure a mess,like the image of 2pacs death chest!,
rest in pieces,i piss on ya grave and yell out "bastard queer!",
while u'll be "underground" with a different kinda "atmosphere",
fucken discusting,2pac hates a wannabe thug,
iz dis puss crip,or is dis puss blood..like gaw-nerie-uhh,
u r drugs,u get smoked up,except no one is addicted,
he's pissed off but ill reverse dat N he'll be like r-kelly's victim,
i got this pussy BANGed up,lets watch him fade,
da only way people wont fuck with u is if u tell'em u got AIDS,
may sound strange but...ure a newb to me,
judgen by ya name,u see what an uzi ussually sees,
after my lyrical sword cuts u up u'll be 'BANGel,
only way u'll touch medal is if u meet kurt angle,
eversince makavelli shot u,ya name's been bang,
runnen away from ghost is the only way u'll eva be "Pac"man,

Yo get this shit poppin! I want to seriously think about this battle.

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"You know I own the steal
Everything aint jabs and hooks and you aint Holyfield"

"We respected Highly -Cus You aint gotta practice gymnastics to catch a body"

Uppin to get this battle poppin

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"You know I own the steal
Everything aint jabs and hooks and you aint Holyfield"

"We respected Highly -Cus You aint gotta practice gymnastics to catch a body"

up 1

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....AITZ
....SuperG

uppin this battle.

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"You know I own the steal
Everything aint jabs and hooks and you aint Holyfield"

"We respected Highly -Cus You aint gotta practice gymnastics to catch a body"

Voted For: BANG

This one wasnt hard for me to pick a winner. Im just gunna tell you both were you went wrong/what I liked straight up...

Legend...
Pros:
-Good Structure
-Used maximum line count
Cons:
-Talked about pac waaay too much (I especially didnt like how you talked about pac shooting your opponent...not right)
-Lines 3-4 were stupid
-Your punches were not hittin hard
-No personals (coulda used your verse against anyone)
-Vocab sucked

Bang...
Pros:
-Hard opener punch, haha
-Good wordplay
-Pretty good structure
-Used pretty close to maximum line limit also
-Nice metas
Cons:
-Some lines were sketchy (way longer than the rhyming line)
-More personals were needed (only used 1 in opener)
-If in any battle your guna spit about beating your opponent up in real life or sum, only safe way to do that is with clever wordplay instead of bein so upfront about it, just not effective
(louisville line)

As you can tell from the way ive critiqued you both above,
^^^Bang in my honest opinion took this one...Elevation is needs for both in the "cons" area. Props to both, peace...

Please Drop feed/an honest vote as I have kindly done for the both of you, thanks... http://community.rapverse.com/showb...593140&posted=1

Aight thats whats good. Uppin this battle

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"You know I own the steal
Everything aint jabs and hooks and you aint Holyfield"

"We respected Highly -Cus You aint gotta practice gymnastics to catch a body"

Voted For: £ÉgÉÑdÄr¥ M¤É

bang weak verse, the punches didnt hit and some lines u werent even rhyming them or didnt make sense or they were played ex. the line with fuckin ur moms everyday and fuck wit me u get bitchslapped,etc. its played should get a little more creative if ur gonna write those type of lines

lyrical had some good punches and some were weak but overall it was a descent verse for this battle and put it up better, better flow, most words rhymed and punches hit harder then bangs

no hate honest vote good luck

peace

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Uppin again. lets get this shit poppin aight

__________________
"You know I own the steal
Everything aint jabs and hooks and you aint Holyfield"

"We respected Highly -Cus You aint gotta practice gymnastics to catch a body"