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09-27-04, 09:41 PM
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Blow Me
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Demons within..
IP: 7D7A FF3D
2nd poem.. these demons within are causing me spiritual frustration.. all will power is weakened i can no longer fight the temptation.. to give in to satin all my wishes and planned are no longer their... all the pain inside from fighting myself i can no longer bare.. god has kept me with power could i possibly question my faith.. no it cant be... i will fight him.. my pain will leave without a trase.. Months Later his words havent haunted me.. its been weeks now since his last visit.. god has helped me thru my pains.. his love is back o' how i have missed it.. When Lucifer gets in your head.. dont give him time.. dont even listen.. Cause the pain is unbarable.. ur power is gone.. its impossible to fight The Demons Within...
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09-27-04, 09:51 PM
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<<-Carpe Noctum->>
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IP: 3240 794D
your content is good, the flow is on point,you used a different rhyming structure, sorry, i'm tired, i cant see anymore...lmao,this was a nice poem, but overall good drop, see you can do this, you know what ya doing....keep it up pc
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09-28-04, 05:20 PM
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Blow Me
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IP: 7D7A FF3D
uppin for more feed..
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09-28-04, 05:53 PM
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who wants a hug????
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IP: 37C2 3ABD
pretty good, i liek it.... but that shit hurts my eyes... lmao, im not fuckin 20/15 here mayne....... haha nice drop
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