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10-09-04, 03:17 AM
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My 10 lines for GODS
IP: AF76 A123
Translating sacred language like aramaic to paint a picture.. Of a blood bath from the Gods, Blasphemous Plots won't taint the scripture.. acquant the mixture, of poets and assassins who remain placed in a fixture.. That destroys all who claim "Ill" fuck poison our spit creates elixer.. Yall lost the purpose, caught up with cash, and victims of label distraction.. Yall sweatin the Gods, you need to be aware thats fatal attraction.. Maim your exaction, we'll leave you nothing but slain and contractin.. The gods don't want your advice, we'll ask you if we want a lames reaction.. don't come at us, we're too intelligent, we're the epitomy of intellect.. You want war, it's suicide, not even mother theresa would pity those who disrespect
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Seek & Destroy We have fun in my basement Time is not long, and indecision is hells cemment. So the well is rented, untill heaven is relevant. Untill then, to be eloquent, sex cells, so le'ts cellibate. "watch what you watchin...fox keeps feedin' us toxin's..stop sleepin' start thinkin outside of the box and unplug from the matrix doctrine....but watch what you say cause big brother is watchin" - nas - sly fox The I.H.C.J.S.F.M.T.R.H.P.M.M.W.T.S.M.S.I.T.F.F.W.A.S. O Crew
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10-09-04, 03:23 AM
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 5043 32F4
yoru so fuckin dope man...how long have you been doin diss?...like fuck yer vocabulary is like fuckin the best..sometimes i come up wit shit like that also but you have the topic thing that jsut makes you good you have that thing you can explain shit so good with big words for example...this line:
Translating sacred language like (aramaic) to paint a picture.. Of a blood bath from the Gods, (Blasphemous) Plots won't taint the scripture.. that was a dope intro...10/10 i think you hit it honestly that was fuckin dope...the best ive ever seen on rv plus rb..you need audio man as soon as my collab wit still remain and illest freestyle is up you should check it man.. |
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10-09-04, 02:57 PM
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IP: AF76 A123
uppin................
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Seek & Destroy We have fun in my basement Time is not long, and indecision is hells cemment. So the well is rented, untill heaven is relevant. Untill then, to be eloquent, sex cells, so le'ts cellibate. "watch what you watchin...fox keeps feedin' us toxin's..stop sleepin' start thinkin outside of the box and unplug from the matrix doctrine....but watch what you say cause big brother is watchin" - nas - sly fox The I.H.C.J.S.F.M.T.R.H.P.M.M.W.T.S.M.S.I.T.F.F.W.A.S. O Crew
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10-09-04, 10:52 PM
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IP: AF76 A123
up0pppppppppppp
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Seek & Destroy We have fun in my basement Time is not long, and indecision is hells cemment. So the well is rented, untill heaven is relevant. Untill then, to be eloquent, sex cells, so le'ts cellibate. "watch what you watchin...fox keeps feedin' us toxin's..stop sleepin' start thinkin outside of the box and unplug from the matrix doctrine....but watch what you say cause big brother is watchin" - nas - sly fox The I.H.C.J.S.F.M.T.R.H.P.M.M.W.T.S.M.S.I.T.F.F.W.A.S. O Crew
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10-10-04, 12:05 AM
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Geaux Fuck Yourself
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IP: B4BC F724
I was fucking feeling it again!!!1
Nice was to work your vocab into your structure and shit... it's all about you... your godly at this shit... straight fiya... 9.5/10
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10-10-04, 04:16 PM
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IP: AF76 A123
uppin....leave some feedback
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Seek & Destroy We have fun in my basement Time is not long, and indecision is hells cemment. So the well is rented, untill heaven is relevant. Untill then, to be eloquent, sex cells, so le'ts cellibate. "watch what you watchin...fox keeps feedin' us toxin's..stop sleepin' start thinkin outside of the box and unplug from the matrix doctrine....but watch what you say cause big brother is watchin" - nas - sly fox The I.H.C.J.S.F.M.T.R.H.P.M.M.W.T.S.M.S.I.T.F.F.W.A.S. O Crew
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10-10-04, 06:20 PM
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You Love My Style.
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IP: 5572 2B68
This was deffinitly hot.
Cant wait to see the finish product
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10-10-04, 06:26 PM
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Mona Lisa.
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IP: 828D 0B7A
This was ok.. started off strong-ish but died in the last.
You do have a kinda knack for flow but you need to choose your wording. Elixer line was coo and fit well into the context of it. But why did you let it slip? Writing isn't all about extensive vocab', its about finding a flow which is hard anyways in text as each individual creates a flow. But stick at it and try to outline the meaning of the story.. instead of rhyming.. to do this audio would be fine.. But peeps take time to read and extract bits to critique. Good read tho. -1
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10-10-04, 06:29 PM
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IP: AF76 A123
this isn't a story....it's just 10 lines reppin the GODS....but thanks for the con.crit...thats always appreciated...much respect to ya
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Seek & Destroy We have fun in my basement Time is not long, and indecision is hells cemment. So the well is rented, untill heaven is relevant. Untill then, to be eloquent, sex cells, so le'ts cellibate. "watch what you watchin...fox keeps feedin' us toxin's..stop sleepin' start thinkin outside of the box and unplug from the matrix doctrine....but watch what you say cause big brother is watchin" - nas - sly fox The I.H.C.J.S.F.M.T.R.H.P.M.M.W.T.S.M.S.I.T.F.F.W.A.S. O Crew
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10-10-04, 08:21 PM
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Above All Else
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IP: 3A63 EE3E
hahaha damn wild... you got alot better then the last time we battled!!! this is definatly a hot piece... not many verses with 10 lines can explain alot.. but this one does!!! much props!!
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