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Old 10-27-04, 02:22 AM   #1
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MY First Freestyle Open Mic :)...Hot?? Iono is it??lol

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First Rhymes That PoP out

This was really a freestyle..these are just lines n rhymes dat jst popped out of my head at the moment..i ain't gonna change w/e pops out cuz its a real freestyle... n it also may not make sence warning you..may not be good at all Also..imma try ta do dis in 15 min..see how much i could get out...

Im also timing my self..15 minutes

Starting Time: 11:03 PM Western Time

I believe, we could achieve changing Our Lives a hundred-eighty degree's...
Some don't succeed, Makin em think wut they want they won't ever breach...
Soon full of disgrief, most people seem to never be able to fufill their dreams..
In their mind they scream, thinkin if only i did this, i woulda got it, it seems...
Is thier a real "American Dream?" Where you actually get wut u dreamed of???
Cuz to get it, it seems tough, since alot of us never ever got or even seen love....
We get put down everywhere, we seem to slip at every stair, so we're very scared...
To actually get out there in the real world, but is it fair that we're jst never prepared....
You know before my rhymes I've never shared! But cuz of this site I actually do...
I practiclly proved, that emcee's can have a future as good as any of u white dudes...
And no i ain't bein racist, and no i ain't hatin, but its happend to me jst cuz im asian...
No chance in the world of rap entertainment! Its like my future has already been painted...
My futures set by God, perminatley marked! N before someone has hurt'n me w/ remarks...
Makin me feel like im alone in the dark..with no flash lights... noone to help n guide me...
Guid me to live a life lively..or not even a person to love n protect me n also be beside me...
Alrite..this is my freestyle.. and Yea, i know it ain't good...cuz yea duh its a freestyle..
but at the mean while.. please think of wut feedback to give me after you re-read this in a while...

Ending time: 11:18 pm Western Time


hehehe..yea trully...my freestyle...as there might be spelling mistakes..its cuz im too lazy to check it..but yea..this is my freestyle.. i guess n open mic.. Im jst bored so i wrote a couple lines with in like 15 min.
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Old 10-27-04, 10:28 AM   #2
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uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin
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Old 10-27-04, 11:06 AM   #3
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pretty deep for a freestyle.i was feelin it.
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Old 10-27-04, 07:12 PM   #4
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Old 10-27-04, 07:25 PM   #5
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nice... had sum good wordplay, flow was aight. multis.. very nice.

pz, baby
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Old 10-27-04, 07:26 PM   #6
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woah..... 15 mins??
hmmmm.... damn...
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Old 10-27-04, 07:27 PM   #7
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... not a freestyle
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Old 10-27-04, 07:41 PM   #8
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wth??okay??? y the hell u say that??I typed what came to my head..n posted it?
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Old 10-27-04, 07:42 PM   #9
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oh my bad.. i guess im suppost to say.. Net Freestyle lol
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Old 10-27-04, 07:49 PM   #10
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Intresting.... I Guess I Am Suppose To Leave Feedback?
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Old 10-27-04, 09:34 PM   #11
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yo this is dope for a keystyle man. you got some solid rhyme's.
keep them coming .
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Old 10-27-04, 09:45 PM   #12
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Intresting.... I Guess I Am Suppose To Leave Feedback?


wth did you even post??
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Old 10-27-04, 09:45 PM   #13
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... not a freestyle

I guess Im that good..cuz it really is a freestyle
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Old 10-28-04, 01:34 PM   #14
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Originally Posted by ..::iNgEnIuS mInD::..
wth did you even post??



Chill Out What Chu Yellin Bout' ...!! lol... Dayum Boi... For Real Though Aint Asked For No.... Beef

You Want Beef Go To McDonald's Or Some Shit..!!!!!!!

Though I Never Meant To Disrespect You .. Playa...!!!! (No This Aint No Apology Eitha) ....!!!


Good Drop Though.. Wasn't Great But It Had Some Nice Qualilties In It... I Believe ......

Half Decent....

Flowed Aight
Vocab - Was Nice
Wordplay - Was Decent.......
And So On' ...

Overall .. : I Enjoyed It..!! ;o)
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Put down a harmony sound like a bugle on an army compound
Fake butts I wake up with revili married a girl name Beverly crown
Some cats hate but never me clowns try be impressive with action
Like an aggressive faction take territories make horror stories attraction
To guns and violence but no funds will silence most groups
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