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Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 10-28-04 at 08:00 AM

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Verbal Phenom has ACCEPTED this battle on 10-28-04 07:32 AM.

Most has ACCEPTED this battle on 10-28-04 07:34 AM.

Picture this...Verbal Phenom dropping a dope rhyme, shaking off the curse...
Verbally dispersion in ya verse, kids immersed in a walloping like life in a herse..
With writtens packin mases,i'll connect to ya brain like a feind to base...
Chasing five votes its a race, u a wheel chair runner, rollin at a slow pace...
Whoever said this 14yr olds an ace?before hes got pubes-forgotten like the aztec race..
Most removes the childish grace from ya face,leave u with scars a junkies trace..
Insecure? it shows thru the self-glorification, preview of his proclamation..
...false truths,smell the grass kid and face it,dose of dick u call this action?
I'm subtractin this distraction with intention, ur v(PH)enom directed in my direction...
Reflects off me-beat this herb with his own verbs,burn ya,its a due-time cremation.

wrote that in 31 mins. im out now. g'luck!

Voted For: Verbal Phenom

Massacre in wordz....

beggin me for a battle, im not one to judge, so here's a tip
don't IM wit shit, like... ["i am elevating"] u wanna be ripped?
^^^^Ill line. Lots of wordpaly and quotes, (Which i like) and some punches that landed wicked good. Closer and U.P. lines were funny as fuck. COmedic and deadly. 8/10

wrote that in 31 mins. im out now. g'luck!
^^^Damn get soem practice. You got merced for real. A few whack multis, wheel chair line was the beast. Flow was off and mediocre at best altogether. 4/10

Return da favor (in ma sig)

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Voted For: Verbal Phenom



Good battle.........

MOst...firsty thing I noticed was how stretched your verse was..and your flow was somewhat off threw out.....definitely takes away from your verses power...some of your punches were decet but you over did it with similes...u gotta mix ya punches up....some of them were played like whellchair line...dats really played...I didn't really see any personals..I saw attempts at the but not quite..if u had personalized more an tightened up ya structure u coulda got it


Verbal..........your flow was way better and your strucutre was tight definitely helped u edge this...and your verse was full of persoanls....they just kept coming...it took away from your complexity somewhat but your lines were hitting...hard persoanls usually gets you a victory an it did here....your vocab was basic thought os that was a negative but u redeemed yourself with some wordplay....not bad

VOte: verbal

Plz return the favor:
http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=156972

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thanks for the feedback. uppin

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Voted For: Verbal Phenom

A true phenom, quick and heavy with punchlines. Not too long and aborious either.

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation.

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Voted For: Most

vote: trauma

pretty good battle

flow: verbals flowed a lot better than traumas....but traumas wasnt too bad.......trauma u should work on your structure a lil bit

vocab: trauma had more vocab....neither one had a whole lot but u know......verbal if u had some good vocab....this could have easily been yours

multis: you should both elevate on the multis.....that could have got my vote if one of you had more multis than the other...

punches: both of you had some good punches....but i felt like trauma came harder with them....and there were more of them


overall good battle....could have went either way.....no hate at all.....return the favor with an honest vote on my battle vs. destiny and my topical vs. king dipset

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Voted For: Verbal Phenom

Verbal Phenom got this easily. he had way harder hitting punches, and better flow and structure and vocab, while most's punches are mostly fillers and some of them aren't punches, his lines are stretched and it screws up the flow and structure, so I'm gonna say vote goes the verbal

can any of yall please return the favor, and place a honest vote in one of my links, thanks!

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