Sup, this is my first drop on RB and something out of the norm, this particular piece is for a hype tracc, which is hopefully gonna be dropped in audio, its written to a beat... Jus think theres something missing... Drop some comments and critique...

Are ya retinas down or ya Knuckles Up?
Look whos dividing the musk from tales of Dawn til Dusk,
Pure innocence, not guilty to trust, simply born from the just,
Rolled a pair of dices for luck, praying earth aint a fuss,
Collect and such, pass GO! show Whitechapel aint stuck,
No sixes and sevens to heavens and got my right to plush,
See my lifes been touched with a mind opened wide,
Peachy seeming to blush, are you a closed book type?
Winded with a gust, theres nothing to rush, Always something to hide,
They say pride is the only mis judgement of my sight,
Deliver light that the greatest souls fail to ignite...
Snakes, Ladders and heights climbed with my eyes,
Now forget being polite,
This train of thought will terminate after your nine lives,
Swing the sword with might in the proxim's of Nova's light,
Faster then mastering the flute of Goa's night...
Dear stoner, twice in ya open dosage, suprise the poison of Cobras,
DAMN! your still sober, twisted in ToriX, look closer,
This is Classical but I aint Mozart,
And I aint gonna mack this solid, move them toes, wha!,
Recited in the finest knowledge, aint it suppose ta,
Philosophy, life is a logic from the beginning, its over,
Produced without the Smooth, all is hope star,
Open ya ventricles with the vibes of a crow bar..
So wait! what we achieved so far, Knuckles Up,
Victims of no holds barred, giving heart and ettiquette to ya systems,
Listen, seek control before all the hitting start, skip in the dark,
Shadow box with spas against the art, Have I stopped, ended?
Mastered the perspective without releasing no message,
Suspected, I didnt stress it, rewind again, I stand corrected...

Thanks for reading, now drop something... MODS, I replied to about 8/9 posts, so dont close this...

Peez...

DAWG I LIKED THIS YOU HAVE ALOT OF LYRICAL VISION

Recited in the finest knowledge, aint it suppose ta,
Philosophy, life is a logic from the beginning, its over
LIKED THAT CAUSE EVEN THOUGH SIMPLY PUT IT STILL MAKES YOU THINK THAT IS MAD TIGHT MY BROTHER CENTZ and i WERE WONDERING IF YOU MIGHT WANNA COLLAB AFTER WE POST A TRACK WITH ALL MY CREW MEMBERS IT WONT TAKE BUT MAYBE A HALF HOUR IF YOU INTERESTED

LOL..Dont Worry About That, No-One Obeys Its, Altho I Will Put Sommit Into Action Quite Soon..

Daaayum, Very, Very Nice Piece Here..

Full Of Internals And Metaphorical Imagery..

I Remember You From DHH And This Is A Very Tight Piece To Start You Off At RB..

Keep It Up Bro..

Peace..

Thanks, its Apprieciated, if ya wanna collab, get at me on AIM - emceerhetorix... Keep em coming...

Peez...

Sup bro, i know ive already tol' ya what i thought, but i thought i might as well drop sum ish on here too..!!

Shit is dope man, nice flow, nice imagery...hypish is definately there man...ima finish muh verse soon...i aint really had time to write tho, what wiv work being such a cunt n me tryna get muh promotion shit sorted...

Anyways, as usual man, dope drop...

Keep hittin tha iLLness nail on tha head wiv ya lyrical hammer!!

Take care bro

speak soon

peace.

Just uppin for muh bro..