i wish that i could change the name & face i've got
for a taste of fame maybe it's myself to blame
My names Chew & i'm walking on a wire
lurching in the dark searching for the fire
or something to hold onto ,, a place to retire
perhaps, can't collapse now
I've gone too far into this shit so its no holds barred
The specific explicit lyrics i made as a selection
hit the recipitants near or at your exact location
with words guaranteed to make some fast connection
to the vast majority dial 1-800 SHORTY
And get your ass to the sorority
The music the broads it's all begun
loosen your belt it's time spent having fun
if you aint down don't clown around
cuz i'll pound you and beat you round after round
I come up with things that sound so proposterous
The time your mom tossed us out what a monster bitch
I ought to hit her with my automobile
you know what; I really outta for real
don't even claim you know how I feel
I'd chill the bitch up just for one meal
Who'd thought youd be just like me
a power so mighty gained from my bracelet
why try to fight me, I gave you my trust
And lent you my tighty whitey's
to impress your date but you burned them despite me
what happened man i thought we were bro's
2b continued gettin baked

make us know wot ya talkin bout man, give it a title or summin. also you need more multies, alot more multies otherwise it just sounds like a basic flow. like most of ya bars were just rhyming at the end for instants...i walk into the fire and you pussys know i aint gunna retire...see man its flows but its really basic. Try new things out. heres n example of good multies...i stay calm ready ta bust..standing steady n robust..ma style never rust as it ready ta leave you heavily concussed. anyway man it was a pretty good drop man keep it up, peace
See da multies flow man?

^blackwell would know by the look of things. i thought this would be about smoking weed tho. work on ya vocab and think more about ya rhymes. put more feelin and emotion into it. try to plan ya rhyme scheme a bit better and structure ya verse into paragraphs n even a chorus.

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yo i thought it was a dope drop......you had multies and some switch ups on the flow.....both these kats are just jealous.........good use of title to get these assholes to read what ya have to say.....all in all keep it up that was a nice piece right there.........1ne

yo wtf man im trying ta help him by giving him advice so how dat make me jealous u lil fag... n trauma if ya wanna beef bout ma record put ya money where ya mouth is ya lil bitch.....set it up

Lmfao...........wtf do i say to this shit? im jealous aye? jealous of what? i didnt even post hate. i gave good feed i thought. hangar1ne u should join crews with sinner ya gay cunt. you prolly are a sinner alias.

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