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Old 11-10-04, 09:00 PM   #1
A'Spyre
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Before my time...

IP: 9FDA A41D

Before my time


I'm pushin my way through this maze, they say pain is a phase, but if it's only that answer me why it stays/
World punches and I punch back, this shit's wack, when everything seems like it wants to fade to black/
A family that supports me, but punks that report me, the cops won't let my image get through they distort me/
Gonna put me into a institution, if I'm such a nuesense then why do you praise my contribution/
I put in way more then I recieve, I'm ready just to pack up and leave, take all that's mine, and leave before my time/

I never wanted it to end this way/
But the world's always got to have the last say
It's Okay they made you this way/
Guess it's doomed to end this way/

Yet before I go, I'll put on one last show, one last flow, that's sure to glow, so you'll all know, I can still go, toe to toe/
A blaze of glory, north side story, Canadian legend in the makes, pushed on through high stakes/
And when the dust dies down, and the time comes to a stop, you'll still remember this drop, it rumbles the ground/
And I'm gonna make sure you like it, you can't fight it, it's tight shit, that I spit, and put forth to you/
You'll love this beat before I'm through, and your crew, they'll love it too, even if it's the only sick thing I do/
So come on and take what's rightfully mine, this beat, this rhyme, the street, don't worry bout me I'll be fine, I'm just leaving, before my time/

I never wanted it to end this way/
But the world's always got to have the last say
It's Okay they made you this way/
Guess it's doomed to end this way/


(Not finished yet.....just need feed on this so far.)
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What life is, ain't what it was/
An answer never ends in because/
Remember these words I speak/
Cause they cause my brain to leak/
Acidic words are always spoken/
My ability to rhyme never broken/
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Old 11-12-04, 05:01 PM   #2
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this is nice. Try shortening your bar's a bit. The flow was allright. A couple a stretched line's. Rhyme are nice but a little simple in spot's.It has a nice hook to it.

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