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11-24-04, 11:33 PM | #1 | |||||
A Reflection Of The Past
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You Were There....
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You Were There..... when we always use to stay up all night and talk about how you been there for me since the day i learned to walk you were there.....when i first fell down -n- got hurt you picked me up and wiped the blood off with your shirt you were there....when i first had my heart shattered you cheered me up in which it always ended up in laughter you were there.....yes you were there.....i thank you i remember when i first got into trouble with the law you looked so angry to where you could break my jaw you were there.....to teach me the good and the bad telling me dont feel sorry for my self, dont feel sad you were there.....to let me know whats okay and whats not you never walked away and always feeled me in on your thought's you were there.....yes you were there.....i thank you now a days your no longer here or by my side but thats because you ran into heart problems and died you were there.....to prepare me for the days ahead i still fill your presence in my heart, even though you dead you were there.....i will never forget what you've done for me, besides my parents you were number one you were there.....yes you were there.....i thank you
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11-24-04, 11:36 PM | #2 | |||||
<<-Carpe Noctum->>
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wow.....this was dope......the imagery..the words...powerful......beautiful man...foreal..keep droppin1
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11-24-04, 11:55 PM | #3 | |||||
The Epitome Of Greatness
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amazing piece... i can relate to this... but anyways this was just written perfectly... the constant re-use of the phrase you were there just made a impact in this verse.. good imagery and vocab probably the best OM of the month so far i nominate this good job
10/10
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11-25-04, 12:30 AM | #4 | ||||||||
mess with me get cooked
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This An Poetry~! Not An Om
Anyway Nice Mayne Good Imaginary I, Felt Yo Feeligns Mayne, The Words The Vocab The Thoughts , Shit Mayne Dis An Dope Poetry..................10/10 *nuff Said*
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11-25-04, 12:59 AM | #5 | |||||
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thanx
but i dropped it in ps and om just to get more feedback
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11-30-04, 12:20 AM | #6 | |||||
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uppin this dope peice
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11-30-04, 02:46 PM | #7 | |||||||
***cITYSLICka***
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im speechless...................................10/10
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12-03-04, 11:52 PM | #8 | |||||
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thanks yall
uppin
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