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POETRY BATTLE TOPIC-sexual desire

Minimum posts to vote: 500

Check in by: 11-26-04 at 11:07 PM

Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in.

Expired, old battle win

Empire has ACCEPTED this battle on 11-26-04 10:38 PM.

Valor has ACCEPTED this battle on 11-26-04 10:49 PM.

Sexuall Desire


that smooth skin with that beautiful body i seem to desire
that sexy touch of the hands seem to put out the fire
in me, im constantly needing you throughout the night
laying in my warm bed playing footsies...to my delight
it felt good...and i needed more of that loving.....
that fun exciting four play which envolved me and you touching
body's i could never resist you, reaching out constantly to hug and kiss you
there is no doubt that if i ever lost you i would definately miss you
but i can never picture losing your love and the extrordinary sex
waking up in the mournig seeing your hair in a mess
from me pulling it all night during those hot passionate love sessions
i sometimes have fantasies of me and you in public and sex'ing
with eachother unconditionally non stop i'd be caressing
your body and smooth skin with lotion,and watch your body move in a motion
that i yet cannot discribe, i remember when i first met you i felt that vibe
ive been hooked on you ever since, use to have wet dreams
about me and you making love in the back seat of a car, with the windows steamed
and foggy, that love, smile, legs, and body i will always seem to admire
to me girl you will always remain my full solid definition of sexuall desire.......

Voted For: Valor

Empire..

i liked your verse but it kinda fell off a little in the end.. plus the fact that id didnt rhyme didnt help you much but it is a poetry piece so i understand that but valor's piece started off pretty weak but gained momentum in the middle and he kept rolling with the topic and it ended up a good piece... empire it was a good bitten verse but valors was better

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unexplained and gay poetry dont need to rhyme dick most of shakespere aint rhyme and bitten you are such a fag thats my poem asshole i got the copyright

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really ... you do lmao ill get the link hold on....

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aiight maybe u didnt bite it but you still lose this battle for recycling smart guy

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...fountain+desire

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Voted For: Empire

oh god... i cant belive im doin this...... heres my break down............

Valor.... ya shit was good was feelin it, good wordplay and flowed quite well.... structure was hit and miss so work on that (in poetry and topicals a text battle structure isnt the best)... you stayed on topic and thats always a pluss... the creativity was good.... but could have been better.... over all u had a good verse. 7/10

Empire.... ya shit was pretty tight.... it flowed well, and wordplay was tight.. i was really feelin it.... structure was differant but i liked it, it worked well with the flow of things and it turned out pretty decent.... you stayed on the topic the whole time and your creativity was deffinitly there... it was very passionate and heart felt, good stuff... 9/10

now valor this aint a hate or DR vote... empire and i have a very shaky history, frankly i dont really like him... but i have never droped a dishonest vote and empire won this one... no hate to valor at all... you both came well and i respect that

Vote........Empire......

this is very true, ive written poetry for years, shit dosent always have to rhyme, thats whats best about poetry, its anything u want it to be....

Voted For: Empire

Nice drop by both, two totally different styles...
I though you both come decent in this battle
but I though that Empire had the better verse.
It was more complex with a lot of hidden meanings
the emotions in both was hott and the vocab...

Pretty dope Poetry battle...

Vote ~ Empire

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As i drink from the well of your passion
cool mists soothing my skin cascading accross my senses
drowning me in your depths
Your taste of sweet honey tantalizing my every nerve
while relaxing my every muscle
I find myself lost as i swim through your ocean of love
as you take me under
deep into the waves of your being
Your current pulling me closer
I can feel your heat melting my soul
burning deep within me
And i can feel your heat more as its building around me
Still i add to the fire until the flames smother us both
Until we can no longer breath
Until we can no longer hear the thunder
but feel the lightening
As it strikes the waters of our fountain of desire
and the crash of the waters is the voice of longing
calling to me....
begging me....
pleading me to test the depths of your need
to calm your Fire as it slowly burns you
And as we reach the final moments of pleasure
As you fuel my Flame
And as i seperate the wetness of your waters
we will both for a moment expiernece heaven on earth

THE FLOW KINDA CHOPPED UP BUT THE EMOTIONS AND FEELIGNS WAS THERE NICE DROP



that smooth skin with that beautiful body i seem to desire
that sexy touch of the hands seem to put out the fire
in me, im constantly needing you throughout the night
laying in my warm bed playing footsies...to my delight
it felt good...and i needed more of that loving.....
that fun exciting four play which envolved me and you touching
body's i could never resist you, reaching out constantly to hug and kiss you
there is no doubt that if i ever lost you i would definately miss you
but i can never picture losing your love and the extrordinary sex
waking up in the mournig seeing your hair in a mess
from me pulling it all night during those hot passionate love sessions
i sometimes have fantasies of me and you in public and sex'ing
with eachother unconditionally non stop i'd be caressing
your body and smooth skin with lotion,and watch your body move in a motion
that i yet cannot discribe, i remember when i first met you i felt that vibe
ive been hooked on you ever since, use to have wet dreams
about me and you making love in the back seat of a car, with the windows steamed
and foggy, that love, smile, legs, and body i will always seem to admire
to me girl you will always remain my full solid definition of sexuall desire.......
^^^^^^^^^^^^ WHOA I LOVE DIS U HAD EMOTIONS AND FEELINGS AND CREATIVITY U EXPLAIN EVERY LIL DETAIL THATS WHAT I LIKE ABOUT UR POEMS


V-VALOR

VALOR GOT DIS BECAUSE HE EXPLAIN EVERY LIL DETAIL AND EXPLAIN THEM BEAUTIFULLY, NICE EMOTIONS AND CREATIVITY

ALL THOUGH THIS IS AN FEEDBACK

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