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Old 12-13-04, 11:33 PM   #1
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Thumbs up *My Love*

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I Cant Explain The Pain I Was Willing To Sacrifice..
The Time We Spent Together Was More Then Nice...
We Waited To The Right Moment To Start It Off..
Now That I Think Of It You Was My Pillow, So Soft..
I Just Wanted To Be There To Comfort You The Best I Could
What Happen?? Coz It's Like Only The First Weaks Was Good
Only Memories Now Exisct, How It Just Pops In My Mind..
The Time It Took With Me And You Was More Then Defined
Your Fine Touch On My Skin Felt Like Silk Rubbing Against Me
How Could It Be, When Me And You Was Never Meant To Be?
Your Lips Felt So Good Against My Skin, Making Me Weak,
All The Kisses At Night Before We Went To Sleep....
Laying Next To You Again Would Feel Like Heaven..
The Midnight Snack We Was Riding To 7-11.....
God Damn How I Miss Them Warm Hot Sweaty Nights...
But Now It's Cold Windy And Rainy On My lonely Nights..
It's Bin A Long Time Since We've Talked Feels Like Forever
Just Know That I'll Be Here For You Wherever And Whenver
Even Though Our Time Is Over I Wanted To Tell You I Love You..
And All The SHit We Bin Though Was Never Meant To Hurt You,
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Old 12-13-04, 11:37 PM   #2
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O aight fam i sense your feelings on this piece.....upp your vocab.....your expression was beautifully nice......use like meta'z........more creativity....give this an 7/10 upp vocab.....struture......meta'z.....and use more creativity


Dont take this in a wrong way (7/10) it was an good piece 1


plz drop an feedback in my om.......The link Its Under my Sig


i'll appreciated
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Old 12-14-04, 12:11 AM   #3
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nice drop, good emotion good use of word's and rhyme's.
keep dropping.
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Old 12-15-04, 01:18 AM   #4
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Thank's Both Of You Much Apreciated
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Old 12-15-04, 01:20 AM   #5
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this was a fairly good drop dawg, u can feel the emotion in this and all but like others have said, your one downfall is Vocab and a little structure... improve vocab and a little structure and your gonna be on target for real dawg....
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Old 12-15-04, 01:25 AM   #6
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Thank's Mang Upping On FeedBack
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Old 12-15-04, 07:44 PM   #7
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Upping Upping Upping
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Old 12-15-04, 07:49 PM   #8
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Nice dawg. I liked it. One of the greatest apologies I've ever read. But ya can't hurt her at all.
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Old 12-15-04, 07:55 PM   #9
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Thnaks Mang, Yea This Was A True Story To, I Hate Break Ups Werd
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Old 12-15-04, 07:59 PM   #10
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yeah. I don't wanna break up with Katrina. She my angel.
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Old 12-16-04, 12:14 AM   #11
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Werd.....................
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Old 12-16-04, 07:00 AM   #12
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yo zeke gud drop man like you opener iight pretty gud...improve on your vocab the nit wud b aiight ,,,,,,,, overall 7.5/10 gud shit......yo klzoe that shit dwn between me and jms bnd or any of the battles peepz........................ yo che kmy drop in suspence
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Old 12-18-04, 02:03 PM   #13
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I Will, Upping THis Shit
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Old 12-20-04, 03:52 AM   #14
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Still Upping This Mang
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Old 12-20-04, 11:37 PM   #15
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Damn Hommie Ya Relationships B Fuckin Up...HaHa Good Drop If I Eva Break Up With Mih Girl Imma Need Ya Ta Write A Love Letter Ta Her Fa Me Good Shit Hommie
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