verse 1

tryin so hard to hold every thing in place by tellin lies to every one to make tem feel happy//
ur notin but a rotten maple tree just to damn sappy//
but to urslef u think im doin my self a great favor//
workin at home is easy tis aint no labor//
passin ur life by givin false lies//
but in tha end everyone tries//
to get thier lives back to normal by tellin tha truth//
go to tha church and confess ur sins in a blessed booth//
to a preist tat will tell u to recite a few hail marys and to read a passage from tha bible//
and to make u relize tat unled lies wont help u in ur chance of survival//
but will lead u to ur death on tha crucifix//
u aint christ so no one is gonna catch tha blood tat drips//
from ur dyin body and ur soul will be releashed//
but is held down by tha leash//
of all tha lies u told to get by in life and tis is wat u punishment is from now on//
even if tha whole world is gone//
u will be left down to die here//
wen tha world whishpers wat everyones fear//
was and u try to run but u cant so face ur final judgement//
its to late for ur ass to repent//

verse 2

in tis constant struggle of livin and diein//
if u keep on liein every day tis shit is just gonna keep on mutiplyin//
ur diggin urself a deeper grave//
wen u thought tat blacks were tha only slaves it turns out u urself is now a slave//
u workin so hard to correct tha lies u told//
but its to late now so pay attention as tha rest of tha story unfolds//
u try to make it as if tha world was a castle built on lies//
but wen tha truth comes out u relized//
not everything is simple to pass by wit somtin as simple as a lie//
u think ur a god wen u told somone a lie and tey believed u and u thought u could fly//
king of tha world as some may say//
but not for tis person durin tha light of day//
u cant escape a fate tats already been sealed from tha first time u lied//
u keep on sayin im doin my best to stop wen u havent even tried//
theres a lie u told everyone u even went to court cause u lied about a crime u did com-it//
ur just notin but a sack of lyin shit//
so spend tha rest of life behind bars or confess ur tru reason//
of commitin all those lies tat r now becomin sins//
now ur screwin urself of ur freedom tat u once had//
now wat is ur kid gonna do wen he has no dad//

verse 3 comin soon

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keep lethal in thy beatin heart/
let thy tactix slip life falls apart/


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THERE WE GO ITHE ADDIRTION OF THIS VERSE MADE IT ABOVE GREAT I LIKED THIS ALOT AS A WHOLE 9.5 OUT OF TEN
YOU LOST .5 CAUSE I WASNT ON IT LOL

yo u want in on part 3 ????

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let thy tactix slip life falls apart/


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umm ok

nice verses


1st verse i give it a 7.9

2nd verse i give it a 7.5



overall both verse where tight








p.s remember about the crew battle lol

yo im workin on tha crew battle as we speak ill have it to ya real soon

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67-30-46 combined overall on rb


keep lethal in thy beatin heart/
let thy tactix slip life falls apart/


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aight as soon as you finish send it to my email address


alex.stayhot@verizon.net

ILL HOP IN ON PRT 3
WHERE WE GO FROM THERE WHERE YOU LEFT OFF

yea pretty much a continunce of it thanx for jumpin in yo do u have a way of e mailin ur verse to me or do u just want to post it in here ?

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let thy tactix slip life falls apart/


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shit was dope yo

peace

ITS ON YOU BUT TELL ME THE SUBJECT AS FAR AS MY PART

u can either have tha first ten or tha last ten lines dont matta to me just continue off of wat i had written and go from thier so ima wait for u to come on again and we will tak bout it ten aight lata

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67-30-46 combined overall on rb


keep lethal in thy beatin heart/
let thy tactix slip life falls apart/


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yo ima do tha first 5 bars and u got tha last 5 bars abuts it gonna be unda unled lies continued again aight

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67-30-46 combined overall on rb


keep lethal in thy beatin heart/
let thy tactix slip life falls apart/


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yo, i was feelin' this for the subject part and some of the rhymes you carried it with, your rhymes were sorta simple, try and elevate you vocab, so rhyming or freestyling will be like breathing, its natural, madd respect for staying on the subject for two verses, i'll peep lack of logic and your 3rd verse when you release it, peace 'n' keep spitting


signed,
~madd

yo lack tis is how we gonna do it ur gonna drop 10 lines in here meaning ur gonna go first and ten im gonna drop tha last 10 and put tha whole thing together aight

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67-30-46 combined overall on rb


keep lethal in thy beatin heart/
let thy tactix slip life falls apart/


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