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12-23-04, 12:43 AM | #1 | ||||||
Light Weight
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Bk Till Tha Death.....
IP: 6DB9 AEFB
check it....
shit.... V1: I don't walk blood, I don't talk blood, but if a blood step in my way, i'ma leave em deep where my favorite color lay, I got niggas to kill bitches to drill/ niggaz need to realize what's the rillest of rill/ throwin shots at my team buckin' on the net/ I prolly clutch one of these young muthafucka'z necks/ in person.. it's for certain I will let the beam spot on ya spleene/ you don't undastand the word CRIP and the drama it brings/ and for a moment I brushed it off denyin' my steam/ but if you must say sumtin' bout my click BITCH it betta be positive things/ don't be throwin hints,lil bits n pieces/ cause all that result is a haulted pulse missin' siblings and nieces/ goddamn my squad is the bar of every flow stay ready hoe/ in any moment I'ma have an opponent when address every foe/ can't u see my fuccin' SIG it's a disgrace to my face/ talkin' shit about my click is a FUCCIN' mistake/ don't take this the wrong way I ain't throwin' shots jus yet/ if I was believe it cuz I'd be sayin names and sets/ so don't make me drop shells on you that a tame ya vest/ I ain't wrapped in innocence n any sense I give lames a check/ I'M OUT
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12-23-04, 09:35 PM | #2 | |||||
Flyweight
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IP: 216A 4740
this was an alright drop....u shouldn't stretch your vereses out so much and but you had creativty but I wasn't really feelin the emotion here...I dunno why but I wasn't feelin like you put effort into this but anyways keep droppin and i look forward to seein you grow and your bars shorten...another thing that you could improve on is the multis and vocab...I mean you had a few here and there but...a few don't do much good and your vocab was okay but....u used uncommon words but they werent like ooo's an aaaaa's ya know....peaceezy
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12-23-04, 11:02 PM | #3 | ||||||
Whys That?
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IP: 840F 1F1A
this is a good ok drop, structure could do with some work,rhyme's are ok.
keep elevating. remember to leave 2 link's to open mic's you have left feed on. |
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