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Old 12-23-04, 12:43 AM   #1
Lawless (Hs)
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Bk Till Tha Death.....

IP: 6DB9 AEFB

check it....

shit....

V1: I don't walk blood,
I don't talk blood,
but if a blood step in my way,
i'ma leave em deep where my favorite color lay,

I got niggas to kill bitches to drill/
niggaz need to realize what's the rillest of rill/

throwin shots at my team buckin' on the net/
I prolly clutch one of these young muthafucka'z necks/

in person.. it's for certain I will let the beam spot on ya spleene/
you don't undastand the word CRIP and the drama it brings/

and for a moment I brushed it off denyin' my steam/
but if you must say sumtin' bout my click BITCH it betta be positive things/

don't be throwin hints,lil bits n pieces/
cause all that result is a haulted pulse missin' siblings and nieces/

goddamn my squad is the bar of every flow stay ready hoe/
in any moment I'ma have an opponent when address every foe/

can't u see my fuccin' SIG it's a disgrace to my face/
talkin' shit about my click is a FUCCIN' mistake/

don't take this the wrong way I ain't throwin' shots jus yet/
if I was believe it cuz I'd be sayin names and sets/

so don't make me drop shells on you that a tame ya vest/
I ain't wrapped in innocence n any sense I give lames a check/

I'M OUT
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Old 12-23-04, 09:35 PM   #2
Def by Mouf
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this was an alright drop....u shouldn't stretch your vereses out so much and but you had creativty but I wasn't really feelin the emotion here...I dunno why but I wasn't feelin like you put effort into this but anyways keep droppin and i look forward to seein you grow and your bars shorten...another thing that you could improve on is the multis and vocab...I mean you had a few here and there but...a few don't do much good and your vocab was okay but....u used uncommon words but they werent like ooo's an aaaaa's ya know....peaceezy
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Old 12-23-04, 11:02 PM   #3
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this is a good ok drop, structure could do with some work,rhyme's are ok.
keep elevating.


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