I've came played, but then i've come dope in the same day...
And many more will follow my footsteps so make way...
Talking to ya understudy and give em a reason to cope...
I took final under my wing, and imma teach him the ropes...
Rap is a game, or better yet we can call it a sport...
Right when you start to break away you just fall to the floor...
And people will do anything they can so you stay down...
Dont even want you to breath let alone to make sounds...
In this game, keep ya guard up or go the opposite direction...
Never stop elevating untill you have reached perfection...
Which ya wont, i mean it's gotta be damn near impossible...
But often you'll, think you passed the last obsticle...
Then you realize, that it wasnt, not to mention u never passed it...
Every time you make a move in this game you get ya ass kicked...
So us vets need to step up, get these kids to where were at...
But to get more kids up on our level some of you fear that...
It's clear that, this game aint exactly easy to rise in...
But it could be easier for these kids if they had someone to guide em...

and instead of hiding em release them on the front pages
for them to get a share of wealth, nomore low wages
exceeding what others thought you could and couldnt do
a shoe in...finally acknowledged...is it false or true
it cant possibly be im makin it does this mean im free?
or maybe an excuse to bring more jealousy and grief
nah thats not it im having the time of my life as it is
but its a business im gettin money easily swiped and im pissed
ive got to get a grip and be beware of the challenges
that become visible to us...like sex after marriages
but i am truly blessed gaining help from some of the best
but none the less now im moving forward nomore regress
instead,becoming a great mind so the vets can think alike
transform from simple to complex making songs every night
im gaining insight so i could give it back when i grow
and help the youth by myself whether im young or old
gaining respect is my only wish now that that has been told
watch me control my growth and blossom as my story unfolds

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this was a good piece...

anxiety: your whole verse flowed i dont think there was one spot where it fell off.. the whole verse also had good wordplay and the structure was good... good emotion and depth dope verse from you

final: you chose the right person to mentor you, one of the best, and i guarantee he will get you up to his level.. you already taking after his tyle... good flow and good wordplay for most of the verse..

you guys took it to another level

dope piece

9.5/10

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anxeity:
damn you came tight i like the reason how you talked about how you helped final out on his elevation and all that....you came super tight with the creativty...i seen a quite a bit of wordplay and creaivty in your lines..very nice...good vocabulary and your stucture and flow were very nicly done....good job...8.4/10

Final:
i liked your lines as well i liked how you talked about how if people try there hardest they will get what they want...as you did..i really liked the creativty you used...some nice lines in there with soem godo wordplay in there n stuff...and damn your vocabulary was done well...and your stcuture and flow were great as well...keep it up...8.3/10

favorite lines:
anxeity:
Which ya wont, i mean it's gotta be damn near impossible...
But often you'll, think you passed the last obsticle...

Final:
ive got to get a grip and be beware of the challenges
that become visible to us...like sex after marriages

drop feed in my single unsuitable life....its in the sig...welll it will be in a sec...

-parallel

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this was a good piece, both had a good flow and good wordplay...9/10

^ Well Gee Wizz now i know how to improve.

dipolsive 1 line feed back wont cut it........

and this was an ill-drop i may-add

final u'r verse was nice, smooth flow, real creative i was feeling the opener: and instead of hiding em release them on the front pages
for them to get a share of wealth, nomore low wages
exceeding what others thought you could and couldnt do
a shoe in...finally acknowledged...is it false or true
it cant possibly be im makin it does this mean im free?
or maybe an excuse to bring more jealousy and grief
nah thats not it im having the time of my life as it is
but its a business im gettin money easily swiped and im pissed
ive got to get a grip and be beware of the challenges
that become visible to us...like sex after marriages
^^ that put a prefect image in my head, flow good, creativeness nice, good job...


Anxiety u also had a good flow, but i thought u was more sick with ya lines N i thought u was more creative plus i was really feeling this:

I've came played, but then i've come dope in the same day...
And many more will follow my footsteps so make way...
Talking to ya understudy and give em a reason to cope...
I took final under my wing, and imma teach him the ropes...
Rap is a game, or better yet we can call it a sport...
Right when you start to break away you just fall to the floor...
And people will do anything they can so you stay down...
Dont even want you to breath let alone to make sounds...
In this game, keep ya guard up or go the opposite direction...
Never stop elevating untill you have reached perfection...
Which ya wont, i mean it's gotta be damn near impossible...
But often you'll, think you passed the last obsticle...
^^^ danm might as-well quote the whole thing right?? it was straight up fire i love the top GREAT COLLABO BEST ONE I'VE READ N SEEN, great good fellas there is noting really to fix up at all danm keep droping them like it hot...

10/10 danm shit hot like fire.....


P.S diplosive thats how u drop a feed-back......

^dam thats some good feed thanks for that...

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