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01-17-05, 01:22 PM
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Forensic vs Personify
IP: E499 D7BF
Battle Rules:
10 Line Minimum, 25 Line Maximum. No Crew Votes. No Recycling. No Biting. No Feeding. No Dickriding. Topical Battle. Topic Is...Plane Crash In Darkness. Please Explain Your Votes..Intelligent Votes Only. Minimum posts to vote: [b]500 Check in by: 01-18-05 at 01:22 PM Must drop verse in 1440 minutes after check in. |
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01-17-05, 01:24 PM
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IP: E499 D7BF
Forensic has ACCEPTED this battle on 01-17-05 01:24 PM.
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01-17-05, 01:59 PM
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New to RV
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IP: E499 D7BF
Undercarriage seem's to be shaking, heart pound's my chest.. Violent internal tremor's, force me to view instruction's of the life vest.. Fasten seatbelt sign glow's and grasp's my attention, captain vacant.. What the fuck has happened? is this the result of a terrorist assailant?.. I'm seated directly to the left of the wing, which is currently trembling.. It burst's out in lashing flame's, but the air won't halt the inferno assembling.. Whimpering voice's bombard my thought's, the night sky hardly visible.. The captain emerge's from the cabin, face stained glumly and miserable.. He announce's that the plane is descending @ a impeccable rate.. He know's we gonna crash, but he can't reverse our inevitable fate.. Individual's panicking, scrambling mobile's to stretch their vocal's to loved one's.. Tear's winding down cheek's, while muttering final message's to daughter's & son's.. All deaden's in a second, the plane is dropping altitude, a mountain is in sight.. Only cos the plane's wing is illuminating the sky, revealing a murky night.. Moon not present, trying to avoid the collision of live's to nature.. One man losing his cool, he grab's his kid's, open's the airlock.."See ya later!".. That incident made my emotion's run in to each other, how could he take the kid's live's?.. He seemed so casual maybe death was a bond, that had attached to his thought's.. Then, a crackle and bang, piece's of the tail were torn off, and wrought.. Colliding with the local wing to me, causing it to completly dismember.. Situation irrelevant, as my mind rack's..My wife im trying to remember.. Clutching the armrest, other arm reaching for my phone, i wait for her voice.. Monica answer's, I blurt "Mon...Monica, I just wanna say,i have no choice....." "I love you but im not gonna be around, somethin's happening" grappling my piece and my lead.. (Monica)"What?...are you saying you leaving me..?"..were the last word's i heard before the line went Dead..
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01-17-05, 06:34 PM
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IP: F367 9744
Personify has ACCEPTED this battle on 01-17-05 06:34 PM.
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01-18-05, 04:52 PM
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'Member Those Golden Days
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IP: C42E C7F8
Darkness' Tricks Time To Think If a trees falls in a forest did it really collapse? If no one sees that one dessert does it really exist? If I enlist but no one sees, did I really sign my name? If life is a game is anyone following the rules to play? If a plane crashes in the night did it really hit the ground? Or is it just your mind playing tricks with sounds? The Plane Crash[b] As blackness surrounds this vessel how do I compare? Defying physics while floating in the depleted air. The lights twinkle below me twinkle as in they decided to wave To remind me of all the people that once were lost that I saved Minor turbulance worries me, but I know that I remain safe, People now start praying but little do they know it is too late The engine has now blown, why do they think of God now? Since death lurks behind their breath God should care somehow? As the little ones cry, I just see the lights coming into view, We are now close enough that I see the morning's dew. As mass chaos ensues I just laugh the pain away, Because in my life this is just another day. [b]Ending My plan for this world is simple, something easy to understand, To fight over sounds and pieces of this meaningless land. My name is the devil, and I consume every single thought, I take responsibility for every battle that has ever been fought If darkness consumes the night then did you really sleep? Or was the loss of life really just a logistic dream? Enjoy this poem, kind of freaky I know, but you know I do my best to freak people out. Lot of metaphors again, if you don't understand then don't vote. Vote Honest Or Not At All px |
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01-18-05, 04:55 PM
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'Member Those Golden Days
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IP: C42E C7F8
Damn, I lost this battle straight up. Good drop For. It is a pleasure to lose to you.
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01-19-05, 10:07 AM
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'Member Those Golden Days
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IP: CCA8 57B3
Uppin this for feedback or for votes..............
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01-19-05, 11:02 AM
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Knock out kings fur life
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IP: EA19 CE95
Voted For: Personify
I liked this one in the opener it had me thnkin also homes good peace I thnk both had some pretty good stuff but you had better flow better strucutre good multis and ur lines where not stretched as the other home boy who did but no hate just keep working on it. over all I give you a 8.7/10 hit up on my links peace |
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01-19-05, 03:21 PM
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'Member Those Golden Days
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IP: 71E7 6664
Wow, this is a shocker. Well who knows, I may win this battle. Vote will be returned.
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01-19-05, 07:19 PM
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STROBE's Favorite Rapper
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IP: 5671 DBDD
Voted For: Personify
OK THIS IS A POETRY BATTLE NOT TOPICAL YALL SHOULD HAVE STATED THAT FIRST HAND BUT PERSONIFY HAD BETTER EMOTION AS WELL AS IMAGERY AND THAT WINS BOTH POETRY AND TOPICALS ALSO HE ALSO HAD BETTER VOCAB TOW HICH HELPED AND A BETTER STRUTURE FORENSIC YOU HAD A GOD VERSE BUT THE STRUTURE WAS BAD AND THE IMAGEERY WAS MADD SHAKY IT WAS ALL OVER THE PLACE AND THAT HURT YOU.
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01-19-05, 08:14 PM
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'Member Those Golden Days
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IP: E330 22F5
Guess I need to edit my post bout losing. Upping (This battle has gotten more votes in a day then my one with final has gotten in like 2 weeks)
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01-19-05, 08:41 PM
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Identifcation
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IP: 3240 794D
Voted For: Personify
Personify Nice Ish Homes, Your Better At Topical Then Battles, Alright First Of Nice Structure I Liked How You Seperated Each Verse Nice Scheme, The Vocabulary Was Very Decent Some Good Ish In Here, The Whole Poem Was Decent Deep I Like How It Came Out Out Off All Three I Liked The Plane Crash, Had Some Deep Ish There, Structure And Vocabulary Was At It's Climax, Then Your First Opener Was Second Decent Coz It Was Deep Into The Topic....9.5/10 Forensic Alright Pretty Decent Topic You Picked Coz It Was Also Deep In Your Verse But Your Vocabulary Was Basic, And Like Personify You Should Of Seperated Parts Your Opener Was Kind Of Basic As Well But I Like The Closer Nice Use Of Words...Strcture Could Use Work Some Parts Fell Off And Lines Was Stretched But Over All Pretty Decent Kid..8/10 So My Vote Goes To Personify Due To He Had A Deep Verse With Some Very Good Vocabulary..And Structure Was Set Up Well.... Vote=Personify
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01-22-05, 11:25 AM
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'Member Those Golden Days
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IP: 4A8A 9C11
Uppin.............................................
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01-23-05, 10:59 AM
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 7BE2 A0A1
Voted For: Personify
Well Time for me to vote Honest LOL or not At All LOL j/k Aii Forensic Opening Undercarriage seem's to be shaking, heart pound's my chest.. Violent internal tremor's, force me to view instruction's of the life vest.. Fasten seatbelt sign glow's and grasp's my attention, captain vacant.. What the fuck has happened? is this the result of a terrorist assailant?.. ^^^^^^^^Aii Great Opening I Loved That It had A nice Hook Best Body lines Moon not present, trying to avoid the collision of live's to nature.. One man losing his cool, he grab's his kid's, open's the airlock.."See ya later!".. ^^^^^^^^^You Have no Heart You dirty Bastard LOL ......That Made me Laugh Rii There So I Liekd It Closing I love you but im not gonna be around, somethin's happening" grappling my piece and my lead.. (Monica)"What?...are you saying you leaving me..?"..were the last word's i heard before the line went Dead.. ^^^^^^^ You didnt Put Much effort Into your closing But i can See where you were tryna go ... i give you a 8.5/10 PX Opening[i/] If a trees falls in a forest did it really collapse? If no one sees that one dessert does it really exist? If I enlist but no one sees, did I really sign my name? If life is a game is anyone following the rules to play? If a plane crashes in the night did it really hit the ground? Or is it just your mind playing tricks with sounds? ^^^^^^ Hold On .........Im Speechless Perfect Opening [i]Best Body Lines The engine has now blown, why do they think of God now? Since death lurks behind their breath God should care somehow? ^^^^^^^^^damn Im Bout to Cry *sniff*sniff* Perfect Closing My plan for this world is simple, something easy to understand, To fight over sounds and pieces of this meaningless land. My name is the devil, and I consume every single thought, I take responsibility for every battle that has ever been fought If darkness consumes the night then did you really sleep? Or was the loss of life really just a logistic dream? ^^^^^ That Right there put The icing On The cake Its Like A trck race you never give your all until the end And damnit You won LOL Aii yall I give my Vote To Perscription I mean Px LOL Please Please RTF in my Sig PLEASE!! |
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01-23-05, 02:08 PM
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IP: D5FE 7245
Voted For: Personify
wow great verses from both... flow-personify, forensics flow was just ofcourse because of his amount of detail...the vocab knocked the flow off everywhere and i wasnt really feelin it imagery-forensic,amazing amount of detail here...the vocab and everything just made you able to see things a lot more then personifys verse... vocab-forensic, basically a lot more vocab and it gave him a way more edge on the imagery but messed up the flow... emotion-personify...this was the hardest aspect of this battle to me...both had good emotion but i loved the way personify did his verse and how he explained things it just felt more emotional beginning/end-personify definately...the beginning and end was taken by personify...those beginning questions were a sick intro to the middle verse and even the end had the twist with the devil kinda thing i liked it a lot, forensics beginning was pretty good but not as good as personifys but i did like forensics ending... this was a close battle props to both for real... no hate good luck to both peace
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