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01-25-05, 11:55 PM
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Whys That?
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To whom it may concern
IP: B91D DBBD
To whom it may concern she's walking down the road,were 5th meets the alley Just on dark,10 minutes from her home she walk's this way everyday,she usually feel's safe But for some reason,she didnt want to keep going ahead she had no choice, so she started to speed up her pace Just as she past a row of thorne bushes,she feel's a hand grab her face "shut up bitch,this wont take long" she try's to scream, but his hands gripping her lips shut he drags her backwards,into a dark deserted alley Looking at me,evil in his eyes,I know were this is heading she try's to kick and fight,but its acomplishing nothing he puts his hand up her skirt,ripping of her undies he pushes her back to the ground, it's being stabbed by rocks and sticks she hopes some one comes down to stop this disaster he stands above her,looking as if he has no care for the world Unzipping his pant's he starts to tell her "your going to enjoy this,wont you bitch? she starts to cry,tears are running down her innocent face he lays on top of her,pushing himself deep inside she is in absolute pain,she wants to die "why me?" she scream's he grunt's groan's,fucks her with no care the she feels him ejaculate his seman inside he gets up running away into the dark she looks between her legs,blood is slowly trickling down to the ground She is in shock,she doesnt know what to do she stands up,runs home,never looking back she starts going gthru alot of recovery and emotional trauma, 8 months later A soldier of a son is born She didnt relise that one night,was gonna be the end to her life even if she is still living fuck all rapist,child molester's and anyone that takes sex when not given.
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01-27-05, 02:55 AM
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IP: 838B 916B
upping for feed.this is only my second poem so blah.
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01-27-05, 03:29 PM
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<<-Carpe Noctum->>
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IP: 28AD 5545
This is very well written, and i agree with your closing statement as well, you had a lot of imagery here in your words, and you portrayed the emotions from a different perspective, this piece is more like an open mic sort of piece, but its still great, nice job.1
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01-30-05, 02:19 AM
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IP: 99B7 217B
WOW ... the message in this poem was STRONG ... had me caught in a daze all the way through ... it was like you grabbed my attention ... i kept wanting to know what happend next and i love poetry like that ... i hope this story isnt true tho ! ... well like to someone you know ... cuz that would be hard to deal with ... and if it is im VERY sorry ... but anyway ... you know i could say do this or that next time ... but wit these types of poems you cant really change things this is str8 from the heart and its more of eh ... emotional poetry ... witch is REALLY kool ! ... Good poem ! ... keep it up ! ...
Peace !! ~1~ |
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