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01-29-05, 09:49 PM
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Banned: Biting
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diary of a soldier -2nd and 3rd entry's-
IP: 6FF2 C222
0200 hours 2/3 1986
dear diary As the plane broke underneath the clouds, i saw the first sight of land
it's a unholy view,its hard to understand As we bump to the ground,And pull to a stop I see tent's and cabin's plus lookout on the hill at the top my first steps out of the plane,I hesitated at first looking around,everyones lifeless,its like the land has a curse We start to unload,when our commander arived we stand in formation,like soldiers deprived he breifs us on the current situation,telling us to stay cautious "we have had 400 death's,anymore we just cant afford this" the gas light's,flicker in the cold steady breeze its the coldest point of the night,must be below 5 degrees i roll up my sleeves,alot of work to be completed we all work strong and together,if not we will be defeated once al the unloading is done,we get a few minutes break The reality has set in,my life the enemy might take 0700 hours 2/3 1986 dear diary im awaken by the horn,time for a quick breakfast
its our first day here,the sights I see,i didnt expect this i see in the far distance,huge holes from bombs of some sort around the camp,is many empty bottles of rum or port a few wounded soldiers,stumbling around the place one guy with 3rd degree burns,big scars on his face another is laying inside a tent,still and lifeless im half stunned,i cant see how in anyway its rightous you can tell who the elete are,and whos destined for death still staring at the guy, i watch him take his last breath they take of his braclet,put in an envolope am i going out like that? this isnt were ill see the end i hope sitting down to eat,i get handed a plate the cook smiling,"dont worry porridge is great" I eat the first bowl, no time for seconds cause the officer in command, is allready taking the daily check in's ................................................
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=170383 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=174013 Last edited by @. : 01-29-05 at 10:35 PM. |
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01-30-05, 05:45 PM
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Banned: Biting
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IP: 6FF2 C222
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01-31-05, 09:56 PM
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: A3EA 639E
i like it alot fam u got skills keep up da good work
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01-31-05, 10:22 PM
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Peace, Love, Unity
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IP: D5E9 EBCF
it was aight... i would of liked it alot more if you had multiples... but i guessit wasn't really about that and it was tellin a story... either way it was decent... keep up the nice work and hit up the open mic in my sig.
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01-31-05, 10:58 PM
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..Rv Sucks..
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IP: 408D D2A2
yeh fam this was nice.........i liked it a lot.........conveyed emotion well........very good imagry........good piece........definately need to get that collab goin
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