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07-20-02, 03:29 PM
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Fallen Descendant of a Lost/Fallen Kind
IP: F8DE F595
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Lost in the eternal abyss of pain.. Wondering the cold, lonesome plains.. The wind blows strong, sun brightly shines... No matter the season, with inane conviction he strides.. All who cross him he meets with venemous rage.. like a seasoned barbarian, once a warrior sage.... Lusting for blood, shed with black vengence.. Death being his bride, he fears no mortal presence... Tore apart from the soul to heart... Life to him, neither a form of work nor art.. Subconciesly searching for stars he'll never find.. Damned to live life with a laboured grind... The dust shall never settle at the feet of this man... when engaged in friendly banter he is blunt and bland... No man, woman or child could ever settle by his rugged side.. for he is destined to walk life against the constant epic tide... A cold fire burns within the heart n soul... Answers dug deep to questions once realised... Life tinted with darkness as black as coal.... Torn by inner pain, nothing left but bleak fate in damnation... Last edited by varentao : 07-20-02 at 03:41 PM. |
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07-20-02, 04:24 PM
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IP: 399E F0FD
I really like the topic and the flow...Holla At My scriptures...
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07-21-02, 02:12 AM
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IP: D06E 4720
this was sum deep stuff even for 3rd person view. get the feelin this is about sum inner soul shit. like how ya deal wit it. and thats just from your imagery. either way top notch stuff. stay up.
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07-21-02, 08:05 AM
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IP: F8DE F595
once again Joey..you have a bit (actually more than just a bit in terms of the 'dealing with it' part) of the perspective/meaning i was writing from...but its all good for real...respect for the comments both of ya all...
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07-22-02, 01:54 PM
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IP: F8DE F595
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07-22-02, 10:34 PM
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IP: 69BB EC0A
i loved this peice as i do all of urs.... i can relate to the character a bit... trying to stay away from his own sadness and lonelyness by running.. but i loved it... and the flow was awesome... keep it flowin
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07-23-02, 10:54 AM
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IP: F8DE F595
you kind of got part of it monkey...kudos for that....and respect for the comments....
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07-23-02, 02:15 PM
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IP: ADEC 56AC
this wat im talkin about keep droppen dem thangs. dis piece was hott good output and well written. yo keep up. uno
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07-24-02, 06:38 AM
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i changed my title !!
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IP: CE07 81DB
strong emotion and flow with a good use of volcab i liked it
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07-25-02, 01:39 PM
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IP: F8DE F595
respect for the commetns dirtyboy and synickle...
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07-26-02, 08:08 AM
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IP: 6D0E B7F7
wow,
ill ish ... as always ... Loved it all ... Keep posten tha illness no doubt! ~1~ |
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07-30-02, 06:20 PM
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IP: F8DE F595
thanks Dimeond...
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08-01-02, 03:21 PM
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IP: 6311 B71F
varentao this was tight piece
very good imagery raw emotionz keep doin ur thang |
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07-23-03, 11:35 PM
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IP: 84B7 08E9
A bit late. But thanks.
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07-26-03, 03:40 AM
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IP: 19EE F2A1
Varentao, I would just like to state for the record that you are an extremeley badass writer, my writing is like a ninja, your writing is like 5 ninjas, all on fire, with flaming swords, then those 5 ninjas are being chased by 8 bengal tigers, and the tigers have swords, and the tigers swords are on fire. In other words, you= way better than me.
peace
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