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02-03-05, 12:47 PM
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T-Dot - Sick (Open Mic)
IP: D4FA A3B8
I wrote this song when I wanted my ex-girlfriend back.
Im only hearing No, still waiting for the answer Yes Waitin on the day you appear in my room n undress Adress this issue... Im sick of crying in a tissue Sick of stayin' up all night tellin' myself I miss you I try to diss you, writin raps to get you off my mind But somehow you seem to appear in every other line Must be a sign, what the hell is god tryna tell me That she loves me, Nah "I hate you" is what she tells me Puts a magic spell on me, but she doesnt even try Sick of askin' why, sick of havin' to resort back to ry Sick of sayin' Im sick of you in every fuckin' line Sick of you playin' headgames every fuckin' time Sick of you actin' like a slut when ya walk in a club Sick of all this crazy talk bout me havin' to quit drugs I'd rather spit slugs send about three to her head Inmature bitch surprised she dont pee in her bed |
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02-03-05, 01:06 PM
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Cus I Jus Ma$fit Dis Shit
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IP: 964F D870
um...its cool...7/10...only cuz im familiar to dis topic oh to well...so im not surprised...good wordplay though fam...return tha fava...link in sig...stay up
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02-05-05, 08:40 PM
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a.k.a prozak
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IP: F4CB 9C09
cool cool u coulda made it a lil' longer but i guess it's fine the way it is 6.5/10 check mine out and leave feedback "Complicated Freestyle"
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02-05-05, 11:37 PM
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Banned: Biting
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IP: 5762 E0DE
Its Okay. 5/10
You Need More Complexity and Vocab Patawan. Elevate. |
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02-05-05, 11:40 PM
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Flyweight
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IP: DA79 954B
you look like a bitch wit this whole shit and it was weak i think
no hate but fuck that slut who gives a fuck mad pussy out there
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02-09-05, 08:33 AM
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New to RV
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IP: 1B71 C7AD
Naw dude, this isnt too good.. Your rhymes were simplistic... Your flow was locked, and you had a structure goin. You need to improve more bigger words, and alittle bit longer of a open mic. Na mean? 6/10
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02-09-05, 08:46 AM
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Black Poet
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IP: 2041 AFC0
Alright yeah pretty decent verse but vocab isn't really needed in poety^
Nice simple style pretty good flow all round decent verse,.. Stay up 1~ |
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02-09-05, 09:17 AM
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Let God Be With You
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IP: 81FD AABF
its aight could of been a lil longer
could of been more complexed and broadened ur range of vocab still an aight drop i wolud give it 7/10
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02-09-05, 09:18 AM
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Let God Be With You
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IP: 81FD AABF
can u return the favor on my battle
vs. dev link in sig thx
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02-09-05, 11:25 AM
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IP: 3450 F354
feelin this....... not a bad flow,, got meanin........... 8.......if dis is real, allow dat hoe.......carry on rappin
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02-16-05, 01:48 PM
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IP: B7EB 8905
thta flow is hot..................nice.....keep doing ya thang............
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