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Old 02-05-05, 03:53 PM   #1
Kawn Flixx
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DisOrder(told from middle to beggining )

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This story is told from the middle to Beggining.
Sort of a play off Nas's Rewind Track.So its Violent.
Its dope if you focus.and a different rhyme scheme
so don't just look at the end rhymes and be an Idiot please.
Thank you...enjoy...I know you will..just REALLy pay attention please.
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Disorder

I rush after him we capture him..
and we strappin him to the back with straps to his back..
He screamign and bleeding,with good reason...
he tells us it wasn't his fault,said that was one of his kids lost..
We slapped him and backed him to his office he coughin
he offered us cash,to leave his office and dash and leave
him alone,take him back home,told us we'll look
back at this and laugh at it,after we pass this..as he got on his
knees offered us mad chips,with Oh so many Zero's..
Conceal the already killed.... though,we don't care how he feel
we heartless and we bout to part with his heart..
spread away form the dead,exitin with arson..but before
we dodge it,the nigga leave the chair,which causes
all the hostages to bother us,they tackle me,knock my parter..
threatin me with an afro peice,now my voice tones down
now I act so sweet...seems karma came back for me..
they wanna rise,then they gonna die,I reach in my vest..
strugglin wonderin why I aint find my 9 peice in it yet..
then it hits me,not an Idea,a bullet pushin through my windpipes..
I see a big light,I'm realsin this the end right?once upon a time
two niggas was power hungery,and was robbin the town for money..
but for a job,a neccecity was an accountaint unleashed..
my homie knew a nigga,who knew a nigga,who was new to figures..
so for permission,we took advantage of his disorder which is..
Desperete from any sortaa friendship,told him we was new to boarder
told the brother we foriegn,wanted to order pizza,after watchin
sports it is a quarter till the our,when we taped up the mouth with..
ducktape to make him soundless..heard the front door poundin
I went aroudn them,took him to the bath and drowned them..
help his feet to spot the splashin and asked him where's the basement..
woke him up by slappin his face with,a loose lock to brake it..
The door latch opens with a Creek,sounded like a nigga sayin E..
behind me he sayin please,so I let him breath,he gaps holdin his chest..
As I open my vest,I hold my knife,the hostage I got holdin the rest..
my nigga at the door with a messege,tells us he got some other niggas..
we can take advantage undercover with us..so its a change of plans..
to the main office,as we adance,and come across with,some little kids
we let him leave,the kids'll live,but that was our mistake..
our 1st captive was too active,as he Tried to escape...
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Old 02-05-05, 07:35 PM   #2
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Old 02-05-05, 09:27 PM   #3
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Old 02-05-05, 09:42 PM   #4
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deph...homie, i really dont know what to say my nigga...dis gotta be tha illest shit i read of yours...i mean jus tha whole thing was hot...are u signed yet my nigga...cuz u should fuckin be...damn...i wanna collab but im afraid im not even elevated yet to tell tha truth...but stay up homie...and IM me on AIM...doebagz104...~1~
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Old 02-05-05, 09:43 PM   #5
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oh yeah...no dickridin was incorporated into my feed...for tha hataz
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Old 02-05-05, 09:48 PM   #6
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dear lord

i think i jus died a little

cuz if we da same age the world is over
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Old 02-05-05, 09:49 PM   #7
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^was that a compliment Lol...i'm 14
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Old 02-05-05, 09:54 PM   #8
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so am i and i aint close to u, respect man
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Old 02-05-05, 09:58 PM   #9
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Thanks Fam,respect is mutual.
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Old 02-05-05, 09:59 PM   #10
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Old 02-06-05, 11:41 AM   #11
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nice nice fam,....i liked it all, except for ya closer but
i think thats jus cause im usta readin ya drops with
tight endings, it was deffinaTELY different from anything
ive ever read on the om board.....stay up fam
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speak of biting, then you fucks flip everyone of my damn concepts
what the fuck, was you high..?
did you think i wouldn't recognize lines that i made
then you come up some bullshit tryna prove that im gay...!
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Old 02-06-05, 11:44 AM   #12
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lol, k , i kno your gonna come in here n say THAT WASNT A CLOSER...LOL
but basically i jus thought you could of broken it up in a different place(bar line)...dunno dawg it was a trippy read
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i'll play on ya consience, ya contents is complete nonsense
speak of biting, then you fucks flip everyone of my damn concepts
what the fuck, was you high..?
did you think i wouldn't recognize lines that i made
then you come up some bullshit tryna prove that im gay...!
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fake fucks..move on...!
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Old 02-07-05, 09:49 AM   #13
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Old 02-07-05, 09:59 AM   #14
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werd this was pretty tight. i like your rhyme scheme. its more audio type shit which is better. fuck sticking to the rules of text bro you gotta elevate above that which u have done. did u write this to a beat? u should start spitting and drop some audios its possible if you really want it. but eh.....nice shit once again. big ups. indeph on some Nas type shit works pretty well.

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Old 02-07-05, 10:02 AM   #15
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feel free to vote on my battle.....RTF. werdnessssss
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