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Old 02-06-05, 07:54 PM   #1
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twist of fate

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Sinner:
Father Forgive me for I have sinned
I try to think about how different it might have been
If I'd have spent a little time with the Guy
To try to find why but I was blind in these eyes that Cry


Priest:
Don't disquise the lie you're hiding from me my son
The Lord loves you, he died because He's the One
Who sees what's done, he's happy with Passion
To make Blasphemy absent if you ask him, so tell me exactlly what happened


Sinner:
It was actually back when I was only a child
I hadn't been to home in a while
Go and open my file, I was in the Hospital often
The Cops thought my Pops was a possible option
My Father was watchin me, strong it wasn't him
It was someone I probably was wrong for trustin then
I must've been just ten I had to bandage my knee
It was damaged and bleeding, he took advantage of me


Priest:
Did you manage to see, the person who did this
Or know his purpose of interest?


Sinner:
That's my personal buisness!
I need merciful wisdoms, that's why I came to Confession
So tame me with blessin' from my anger aggression
I was aimin my Wesson then considered it further


Priest:
Son, what was the sin you commited? -


Sinner:
-Murder!

I spit the burner and unloaded the clip
His head exploaded and ripped till it was opened and dripped
It was grosser then shit but I wanted him more dead
I poured led through the front of his fore head
And all the gore bled on the floor red


Priest:
Son, you know well you'll go to Hell, and jail's scary
You can't expect forgiveness by sayin Hail Mary
Sin prevail's rarely from the Culprit with in
And killin is the ultimate sin


Sinner:
YOU'RE FUCKING FULL OF SHIT FRIEND! HOW THE FUCK CAN IT BE WORSE THEN
TREATING A LITTLE BOY LIKE HE WASN'T A PERSON?
HE DOSEN'T DESERVE IT? IS THAT WHAT YOU'RE TRYIN TO SAY?
YOU SEE A KID CRY AND PRAY WISHING HE COULD FLY A WAY
WISHING HE DIED THAT DAY? HE USED TO BE SAFE
NOW HE'S GETTING ABUSED AND RAPED, LOOSIN HIS FAITH
HE'S BRUISED AND HE'S CHAIFED, CRYIN, BLEEDING AND HURT
BUT IF HE SPEAKS A WORD THE PERV WILL PUT HIM DEEP IN THE DIRT
DON'T BELIEVE WHAT YOU HEARD! SOME THINGS ARE MUCH WORSE
THEN GIVIN A FUCKING PERVERT WHAT HE DESERVED


Priest:
Have police gotten word? Are they askin away?


Sinner:
I can't actually say, this just happened to day


Priest:
Well, after you pray, here's what I want you to do
Let the Police decide the judgement for you
Serve your punishment through, then if you ever parole
Then give Jesus your heart, and give Heaven your soul
Forever your goal is just to praise him alone
Then adopt or have a baby you can raise on your own
Dedicate your life to just exist as a Dad
Give him everything you ever wish that you had
Teach him about Jesus, make him believe him
You took a life, you gotta give a life to break-even


Sinner:
That's all I gotta do to be clear from my sin?


Priest:
Yeah basically just stay and be sincere to your Kin


Sinner:
I hear you my friend, the game's intimidation
I seen people walk for this same situation
Like thier brain isint facin the resultin' consequence
Assumin every Human is full of Common Sense
So I owe you compliments, I aint afraid in the least
And by the way, he was a Priest


Preist:
Whoa wait!
What's the name of the deceased, are they findin it out?
What time did you kill him?


Sinner:
What time-is-it-now?


BANG! BANG!


Sinner:
You Fuckin Child Molester
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Old 02-06-05, 07:58 PM   #2
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that's some creative stuff yo props
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Old 02-06-05, 08:02 PM   #3
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<-- *wiping a tear from his eye*

that was a beautiful peice. Some real talent there. I hope a lot of peeps take the time to read this. Very nice drop bro, Damn i would be proud if i came up with something like this.

It was original and very wel thought-out. I liked the whole idea to it well done

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Old 02-07-05, 12:23 AM   #4
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dat was good u got potential it was real as a muthafucca
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Old 02-07-05, 01:49 AM   #5
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it was aiight... wasn' feelin too much of the structure.. n didn't really have too much to say.. i think if you shortened it a little it'd be more interestin and onpoint.. get on ya job dun.

5/10
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Old 02-07-05, 02:51 AM   #6
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hey yo this is dope.

Story line is sick!! flow is allright could be changed in a few spots.rhymes are solid,good multis in this. I love the twist at the end.
keep dropping.
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Old 02-07-05, 04:32 PM   #7
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any more feed back on this?
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Old 02-07-05, 06:12 PM   #8
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Nice. Alot of unique shit.lol. I hope you get in
Great flow all I gotta say.
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Old 02-07-05, 07:14 PM   #9
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Originally Posted by Cannabarz
it was aiight... wasn' feelin too much of the structure.. n didn't really have too much to say.. i think if you shortened it a little it'd be more interestin and onpoint.. get on ya job dun.

5/10



Wat the fuck???? wat were you reading?
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Old 02-07-05, 11:42 PM   #10
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lol dont worry dex haters will hate!
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Old 02-09-05, 01:16 AM   #11
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more feed on this you lazy fucks.
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Old 02-10-05, 06:22 AM   #12
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wow hard work for nothing!
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Old 02-15-05, 11:38 PM   #13
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upping for constructive feed on hwo to make this better!
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