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02-06-05, 07:54 PM | #1 | ||||
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twist of fate
IP: AA11 D51C
Sinner:
Father Forgive me for I have sinned I try to think about how different it might have been If I'd have spent a little time with the Guy To try to find why but I was blind in these eyes that Cry Priest: Don't disquise the lie you're hiding from me my son The Lord loves you, he died because He's the One Who sees what's done, he's happy with Passion To make Blasphemy absent if you ask him, so tell me exactlly what happened Sinner: It was actually back when I was only a child I hadn't been to home in a while Go and open my file, I was in the Hospital often The Cops thought my Pops was a possible option My Father was watchin me, strong it wasn't him It was someone I probably was wrong for trustin then I must've been just ten I had to bandage my knee It was damaged and bleeding, he took advantage of me Priest: Did you manage to see, the person who did this Or know his purpose of interest? Sinner: That's my personal buisness! I need merciful wisdoms, that's why I came to Confession So tame me with blessin' from my anger aggression I was aimin my Wesson then considered it further Priest: Son, what was the sin you commited? - Sinner: -Murder! I spit the burner and unloaded the clip His head exploaded and ripped till it was opened and dripped It was grosser then shit but I wanted him more dead I poured led through the front of his fore head And all the gore bled on the floor red Priest: Son, you know well you'll go to Hell, and jail's scary You can't expect forgiveness by sayin Hail Mary Sin prevail's rarely from the Culprit with in And killin is the ultimate sin Sinner: YOU'RE FUCKING FULL OF SHIT FRIEND! HOW THE FUCK CAN IT BE WORSE THEN TREATING A LITTLE BOY LIKE HE WASN'T A PERSON? HE DOSEN'T DESERVE IT? IS THAT WHAT YOU'RE TRYIN TO SAY? YOU SEE A KID CRY AND PRAY WISHING HE COULD FLY A WAY WISHING HE DIED THAT DAY? HE USED TO BE SAFE NOW HE'S GETTING ABUSED AND RAPED, LOOSIN HIS FAITH HE'S BRUISED AND HE'S CHAIFED, CRYIN, BLEEDING AND HURT BUT IF HE SPEAKS A WORD THE PERV WILL PUT HIM DEEP IN THE DIRT DON'T BELIEVE WHAT YOU HEARD! SOME THINGS ARE MUCH WORSE THEN GIVIN A FUCKING PERVERT WHAT HE DESERVED Priest: Have police gotten word? Are they askin away? Sinner: I can't actually say, this just happened to day Priest: Well, after you pray, here's what I want you to do Let the Police decide the judgement for you Serve your punishment through, then if you ever parole Then give Jesus your heart, and give Heaven your soul Forever your goal is just to praise him alone Then adopt or have a baby you can raise on your own Dedicate your life to just exist as a Dad Give him everything you ever wish that you had Teach him about Jesus, make him believe him You took a life, you gotta give a life to break-even Sinner: That's all I gotta do to be clear from my sin? Priest: Yeah basically just stay and be sincere to your Kin Sinner: I hear you my friend, the game's intimidation I seen people walk for this same situation Like thier brain isint facin the resultin' consequence Assumin every Human is full of Common Sense So I owe you compliments, I aint afraid in the least And by the way, he was a Priest Preist: Whoa wait! What's the name of the deceased, are they findin it out? What time did you kill him? Sinner: What time-is-it-now? BANG! BANG! Sinner: You Fuckin Child Molester |
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02-06-05, 07:58 PM | #2 | |||||
Middle Weight
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IP: F964 623A
that's some creative stuff yo props
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02-06-05, 08:02 PM | #3 | |||||
Gods Of War! -yeah im one
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IP: C2DF 7A85
<-- *wiping a tear from his eye*
that was a beautiful peice. Some real talent there. I hope a lot of peeps take the time to read this. Very nice drop bro, Damn i would be proud if i came up with something like this. It was original and very wel thought-out. I liked the whole idea to it well done 9/10
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02-07-05, 12:23 AM | #4 | |||||||
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IP: A3EA 639E
dat was good u got potential it was real as a muthafucca
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02-07-05, 01:49 AM | #5 | ||||
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IP: 0FD2 EC32
it was aiight... wasn' feelin too much of the structure.. n didn't really have too much to say.. i think if you shortened it a little it'd be more interestin and onpoint.. get on ya job dun.
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02-07-05, 02:51 AM | #6 | ||||||
Whys That?
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IP: AA11 D51C
hey yo this is dope.
Story line is sick!! flow is allright could be changed in a few spots.rhymes are solid,good multis in this. I love the twist at the end. keep dropping. |
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02-07-05, 04:32 PM | #7 | ||||
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IP: B91D DBBD
any more feed back on this?
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02-07-05, 06:12 PM | #8 | ||||
Back....
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IP: 394D 11B4
Nice. Alot of unique shit.lol. I hope you get in
Great flow all I gotta say.
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02-07-05, 07:14 PM | #9 | ||||||
Gods Of War! -yeah im one
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IP: C2DF 7A85
Quote:
Wat the fuck???? wat were you reading?
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02-07-05, 11:42 PM | #10 | ||||
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IP: B91D DBBD
lol dont worry dex haters will hate!
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02-09-05, 01:16 AM | #11 | ||||
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IP: 4257 B15B
more feed on this you lazy fucks.
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02-10-05, 06:22 AM | #12 | ||||
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IP: 24E9 D8AC
wow hard work for nothing!
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02-15-05, 11:38 PM | #13 | ||||
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IP: 343B 7618
upping for constructive feed on hwo to make this better!
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