just a couple of commercial beats i played around with.. check em out.. Hit me up wit some feed back on the DISS one, and FAME.. thanks


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aight i listened to FAME...

aight wasn't feelin ya flow on this...feel off beat a lot...dont like how you came in...delivery needs work...didn't keep my attention...lyrics are ok...i think you try to fit to many words in ya flow i think you need to re write and reformulate ya barz...did you just go to audio if so i know mad text heads who have probs making the transtition from text to audio...they try to write and spit like they did when they were doing text...but really cant do it...try writing to the beat...peace


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flow wasn't bad bro, im checking out hatred but damn homie, "D" had the right words... my homie went thrue the same problem... he use to write and then coming onto audio had trouble being on beat... his flow was nice but way off beat... peeps still liked it but he had alot of work to do,.... so he did, thats what you need to do is work on your shit bro, you won't change the way you write right away, but try to listen to the beat and the bars of the beat... and write to it... listen to the beat... and any profesionnal artist... and you will notice that they most of the time spit on the snare... and they still spit to the beat anyway... I think that you will need to maibe shorten your lines in written... or try anything homie

keep dropping flow ain't looking horrible wich is a good thing... build from that , and basicly work on the lyrical, then once you have it down on beat, the rest will come and you will need to work on other things...

hey nobody said recording and making music was easy bro,

keep ya head up


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Yo really appreciate the Feedback guys, yah thats one thing iam working on written to the beat .. Imma hit yah up wit some feedback on yah joints, in a bit..

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