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02-19-05, 08:38 AM | #1 | ||||
Odi et Amo
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My heart
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Bruised but ready to finally love again Ready? Can someone be ready to love or be loved? At least, I managed to put the past behind me Can someone forget memories or just avoid them? Not seeking for love because the best things come unexpected Then why do you dream of being together with him? Jealousy is out of my system now Then why do you have hatred inside your heart? I will soon experience pure love Then why are you crying? I will be loved How do you know? I will love Who? Me
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02-19-05, 01:40 PM | #2 | ||||
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I loved this piece from you girl...i liked the whole conscience thing...you really had that workin for you...thats what caught my attention is why are those italicized, and then i finished it and i realized that its kinda like your questioning yourself or your conscience is speaking in your ear...anyways...nice drop fam...8.5/10
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02-19-05, 01:53 PM | #3 | ||||
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Thanks for the feedback, much appreciated!
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02-20-05, 09:50 AM | #4 | |||
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dat was hot fam i like the structure best it was a billiant poem in my opinion you get betta and betta everytime i read sumin from you keep droppin
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02-20-05, 09:58 AM | #5 | ||||
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Thanks for feedback fam, much appreciated! Drop links so I can return the favor...
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02-20-05, 01:06 PM | #6 | |||||||
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damn dats my girl!!! hell yea...good emotion i had to read dis 3 times cause it was so damn good....wow u droppin some hot shit lately girl...hit me up fo a collab.....damn.........keep it up
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02-20-05, 03:25 PM | #7 | ||||
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^Thanks girl! Much appreciated!
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02-21-05, 03:14 AM | #8 | ||||
Back....
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Peice was nice. :P. uhm I don't get it but it touched me in a special place.
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02-21-05, 11:22 AM | #9 | ||||
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^Lol...it's not that hard actually...well, for me it isn't
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02-23-05, 06:56 AM | #10 | ||||
Odi et Amo
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.....Uppity up up....
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02-23-05, 09:36 AM | #11 | |||||
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this was very intriguing ma i felt ur emotion in this 1 it especially u got talent in poetry so ur a pro at this keep up the good work
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02-26-05, 05:58 PM | #12 | ||||
Odi et Amo
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^Thank you very much, anymore feedback people?
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