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Old 03-05-05, 11:38 PM   #1
Kamikazee
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Freestyle (Tony Green Diss)

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Ill have u like a pencil loaded wit nothin but lead,
Aint gonna stop blastin until all ur blood is shead
Dawg u gonna make me run up on ur ass wit da heat,
Have ur ass removed from da streets like i pressed delete
When da gun comes out, yall choke and shit gets silent,
Cut ur body up hide it from da feds cuz im dat violent
Should have thought dis out cuz u really dont want it wit me,
All da hits yall put out on me and not even one them hit me
Yall jus think yalls trippin out but its really fear takin over,
Start prayin da only two things will help u is god and a 4 leaf clover
Tony Green tryin to come at me wit his weak ass rhymes,
Dawg u really dont know me i been convicted of murder crimes
After i let dis shit loose, life or death is wut u gonna have to choose,
Tony da next murder victim on da news, put dis fool 2 sleep like pressin snooze
U want to start some beef, then dont come at me wit dis dumb shit,
Cuz i carry my gunz wit out permits, i suggest u jus give up and quit


Dats wuts up bitch!!!!! Get Da Fuck Back!!!!!!!!!
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Old 03-06-05, 12:53 AM   #2
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..................................uppin........... .................
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Old 03-06-05, 03:04 PM   #3
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uppin dis shit leave some feedback bitches........Pz
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Old 03-06-05, 03:09 PM   #4
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Some decent wordplay here n there, nice flow an structure too, just need work on ya punchlines

But did you get the password for the 1st floor crew forum?
go check it out an check in n stuff, not many threads but by tonight it'll be up n running properly...

An can i get te hook for the collab?
pm it ta me when your done, dont rush tho, i'm still waiting on 2 other verses, but just pm it ta me when your good n ready homie
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Old 03-06-05, 09:22 PM   #5
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nah i aint get da password homie send it again.......and ill start on da hook right now....Pz uppin
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Old 03-06-05, 09:28 PM   #6
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This was alright. It was a good comeback for the diss that was put on you so that helped out. There was some pretty decent shit in there and some alright wordplay and what not. There were only a few punclines in there and thats what I suggest you work on. you need to be more complex with your punches and concepts. This was still a nice diss on him either way. Just elevate.
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