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Old 03-08-05, 06:30 PM   #1
Hollow
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Hot Shit, second freestyle !!!

IP: 18CC 30C4

Im bouta spit dis to da knuck if you buck instrumental...its supposed to be spittin rill fast so you might not get da flow in some parts...

Hook:
Are you rilly wit it cuz
do you rilly fell it cuz
im bouta get it poppin and crackin
fa all my lil nigga's and youngin's das from philly cuz

2X

Verse 1:
I hang Witcha baby
Im Bangin ya baby
All in da bed doin things witcha baby
im bangin her crazy
she sayin no baby
kids and a house what she thinkin of lately
you rill optomistic
da 5th and you bitchin
watch you be missin
witcha head in a kitchen
im sparkin a death act
you walked in a death trap
and if you think dis da shit
den chalk it till da next track

HOOK

Verse 2:

i got
bars fa days
cars on da way
da way i spit
will have deeze nigga's seein starz fa dayz
you hardly paid
talkin bout how you huggin ice boll
nigga's think its sweet
till dey get dey fuckin life tore
i got booked
but i was like, shit juss fuck it
pull a banga out and juss like split ya bucket
go to ya crib and juss like admit i done it
you think you hard as shit
but nigga you dont rilly want it
Aint no nigga in fear of you
dont know shit, and you terrible
da way im spittin is lyrical
will have you shittin rill spiritual
deeze nigga's hot when i rockin
but dey drop when im poppin
sayin my watches is blindin
den get shot and dey hidin
and when you write den you trash
and i am nice in dis rap shit
gotcha wife on my ass
and gotcha life doin backflips...
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Old 03-08-05, 09:14 PM   #2
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ur flow wasnt that good either was ur structre rhymes were horrible up ur vocab alot and don use the same word over like ya did in the first 3 lines weak hook theres no hat though go to the emergency help center and look around there ro u can PM me later and ill give ya advice...please return the feedback in one of my open mics in my signature...peace keep workin at it man ya got potential
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