I sit here alone by myself tonight,
Looking up at the stars that shine so bright.
I really hope in the future to be your wife,
I can’t even picture how it would be now if you hadn’t came into my life.
Wishing you were here with me,
I love you so much Bobby Lee!
When you wrap your arms around me tight,
I know you’ll always love me, and everything will always be alright.
With you I never have any fears,
I know you’ll always be their to wipe away all of my tears.
My love for you will always stay true,
I’ll stick by your side no matter what we shall go through.
When were together time goes by so fast,
I guess its because we have such a blast.
You make me laugh, and make me smile all the time we’re together,
You’re understanding, and you show me that you really care, and want to be with me forever.
Our hearts will never be torn apart,
Bobby, I love you with all of my heart.
I think about you every second of the day,
You and I forever as one I hope it stays that way.
I trust you, and I place my love in your hands,
I hope we have the future that we plan.
Sometimes you and I cry, but most of the times we laugh and smile,
Just to be with you and see your adorable face I’ll walk how ever many miles.
We’ve been through a lot of rough times together with each other,
Our love is so very strong for one another.
You and I should last a lifetime and even longer,
Because, our love keeps getting stronger and stronger.

Dude you need to fix alot of your shit. Flow was off and structure mad wack.
Well keep working you just didn't stay on topic.

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it was not 2 good but just keep workin' at it cuz it'z ur 1st piece u continue 2 elevate as time goes by...structure was off...vocab was ight need elevation...& overall was ight u will come alot betta next time i know u will 6.5/10
also make sure 2 return the favor in my battle: http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=180742

Thanks for being honest, I appreciate it . . I'll try and return the favor because, I'm new at this stuff and I really don't know how to really judge for things yah know?

Flow was off and strucutre was kind of fucked liked the fact you talked about your love .....um just elevate you can only get better with time!5/10

btw repay the favor links in sig!

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like erbody else was sayin ya flow was off and ya structa was fucked
but i guess it was aiight u no u juss need to elevate...6/10
return da fav.on my new post....."now u no"......i holla

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