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03-23-05, 06:03 PM | #1 | ||
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It tugs on my heart when i see homeless children and teens man, it seriously does. If you think about it, we are fuckin rich to these people. I mean we are on the net, people on the streets think its used for fishing.
maybe this open mic will make you think the same way. Check. Saw him with ripped pants, no jacket and no shoes on him New Yorkers' hearts cold as the weather so most dudes wronged him You have headphones, rappers talk like they "bust they slugs" And his monday grub can be some of your subway club But some say "drugs is why he begs for money," and "why ask here?" If everything was spent on drugs, he would've died last year His blue socks once were a rich girl's... she threw them away No sleep or eating since saturday, so how much do you do in a day His childhood friends, they never really knew him this way He's do unthinkable shit now just to get some food on his plate Life and strife synonymous, and every day's monotonous So how would we all act if all that was upon us? You eat in front of him, he begs for nickels, dimes and quarters You say you're broke but got 3 quarters back with your order White man sleeps on the train, you think he's drunk or he's dead Minority does it and he's homeless or a punk in your head If I was going through the same I would just kill myself Than to live homeless cold and sick, and can't pay the bill for health I couldn't give him any money, cause I was broke too But I have credit cards, a bank account and home to go to. His little nephew loves 50 Cent, he went for the same Not knowing his uncle hasn't got 50 cents to his name So I got home and cried for those alone outside What makes me better than this man? he's on his own, survived Hebarely makes it through the say, it's the life that he must live So I ask god and I ask you... Where's the justice? Learn sympathy? This, you haven't seen around in your lessons But think of this man, cause you can sit for hours just counting your blessings... Leave FeedBack on This shit... I dont give a fuck about structure, spelling or grammer ...its content that fuckin matters. Word is Bond. Orion.
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03-23-05, 06:15 PM | #2 | ||||
E-Style, Bitch.
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Honest opinnon?
aight here goes my niga... His little nephew loves 50 Cent, he went for the same Not knowing his uncle hasn't got 50 cents to his name ^^^ thats the best bar in the peice.... the rest was, i dunno, i wouldnt say boring, cause i read it all, an i didnt get half way thru an think...whaaack, but its i dunno, its pretty hard ta explain, i think the way u word your verses could of been better, so when u read it, it actually flows better...do ya feel me? but it was nice, the concept of the peice was somthin diffrent, the emotion an the message u sent across was hard hittin an emotional, overral it was enjoyable, its just the way u worded some of the lines, it didnt flow too well in my head, ya know? when i was reading it, it was almost like reading a book in some parts, but i enjoyed it too the fullest, maybe u dont understand what am trynna say with the whole ''didnt flow well in some parts'' comment, an by no means it is not a hate commenst, cause it was deep, fyull of emotion, an the idea an concept couldnt of been any more on point i rate this peice a 8.5/10...would of been a 9, but for the things i stated above, it took the sting out of some of the points u tried ta make dope stuff tho, keep em comin dogg Peace out
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03-23-05, 06:19 PM | #3 | ||
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aiight thanks...just a quick keystyle....anyways...uppin....
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