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03-24-05, 12:36 PM
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Listening For Love ft Katrina
IP: 84C5 840E
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Love is like a battle. Easy to begin but hard to end “I Love You” Those three words have my life in them I’ll love you till the sun goes cold and the stars grow old When I hurt you in any way I’ll die dead on the road Like a nerdy geeks grades my love for you is progressin Everyday I lay in my bed thinking of you. You’re an obsession You bring out the timid shy and soft guy in me I’m always at a point where I’m only feeling dizzy Girl can my fantasy actually become a reality And do you love me back is what I dream of you asking me I’m trying to say what people need to mention But that right there is out of the question I try but I fail to do and that is staying strong Why am I searching for something I’ve had all along? If our love will ever work out, I’m blind But all I want you to know is that you’re always on my mind Chorus x2 Girl the greatest thing you and I will ever learn Is to love and to always be loved in return Tell me what I am feeling. What is the purpose? Why can’t I tell you I love you without bringing tears to the surface? You don’t listen. Pay attention I’m on my knees confessin I swear if we are listening for love we both will learn a lesson Katrina I ask every night, do you regret ever hurting me? I asked every day would you like the others continue deserting me You heard me screaming, but on your shoulder was where I was leaning Ah the word love and we added true to it and boy you showed me the true meaning You have me scared of the future and I don’t want to back track How can I give you up our love for each other was so massive? Me trying to forget about you is trying to forget about someone I never knew But all I want you to know is that I didn’t mean to hurt you and I still love you Chorus x2 Girl the greatest thing you and I will ever learn Is to love and to always be loved in return Tell me what I am feeling. What is the purpose? Why can’t I tell you I love you without bringing tears to the surface? You don’t listen. Pay attention I’m on my knees confessin I swear if we are listening for love we both will learn a lesson Link. Forgot but here it is. http://community.rapverse.com/showt...058#post2065058 LI Complexity
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03-24-05, 12:44 PM
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I don't want crappy feed back ya'll. Leave feed back so I know you read it.
Uppin....
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03-24-05, 12:49 PM
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IP: 3240 794D
^^^^^Dis shit was pretty good yall had a lot of emotion into it.....da flow was good good wordplay and some good metas.......i was feelin dis shit....i give it a 7.5/10.....~1~
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03-24-05, 12:53 PM
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aiight i got you...
ok...overall, it was a decent open mic, nothin really special, (in my eyes) but yeh its an open mic i liked it...um it had its ups and downs, more ups than downs lol... Ups: um, i liked the story, but then again alot of people could call it played but its whatever bro, and by story i mean the content, coz there really wasnt that much of a story to tell ya feel. I liked how you used a few vocab in there and they werent big ones either so that made it better, i hate it when people use big words and i have to go fuckin look it up...Katrinas verse was a little streched but its whatever, express it how ever she fuckin wants...  downs: well your flow sorta shifted a few times here and there...and i was reading it feelin the flow of it then all of a sudden the flow cuts off a few sylables...  didnt like that coz then you have to start again on a new flow, just keep it going at the same pace. um..THE CHORUS was dope, but you dont have to repeat if 2wice, im sorry but thats too fuckin long...but yeh...good dropi dont rate 1-10, sooo herbish....3 and a half stars... RTF on Expiration, its in the forum, its not that great but i just want some feedback yo...aiight pz..
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03-24-05, 12:57 PM
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IP: 84C5 840E
weerd thanx to both ya'll and I'll check ya OM.
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03-24-05, 01:29 PM
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IP: 9AB5 3E19
Concept might not be too special but I enjoy reading this type of drops because you notice the truth in it. It doesn't take a genius to figure out this was written from the heart.
The strongest aspect was the emotion of course, I feel you portrayed an image of sorrow, confusion, insecurity but the most clear one was the love. Your word choice was excellent, you managed to really picture it inside my head and make me feel what you experienced. The flow wasn't always that good but it didn't affect the content of your piece in any way. I enjoyed reading the hook and also the different levels in your piece itself were nice to read. You made me stand still here and there, think about love and my own life in a way. It's also easy to relate to because everyone has been in a similar situation before I think. Solid drop! DQ
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03-24-05, 03:50 PM
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Load of bullshit, it really was dont try to be poetical you are wack like a tennis player.
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03-24-05, 11:11 PM
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ok thanx for the feed DQ and I'll ignore the cunt that just posted. I ain't got time for your bull shit.
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03-25-05, 05:16 AM
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IP: F261 6256
Uppin this drop....
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03-25-05, 12:18 PM
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IP: 3DE0 ABCB
uppin this drop......
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03-29-05, 02:54 AM
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yo uppin fo feed and leave a link so I can RTF...
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04-02-05, 04:27 PM
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IP: 2755 0A99
I don't like doing this. Uppin.
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04-03-05, 05:34 AM
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IP: DFC2 4C11
Overall:
The topic wasnt too original, but hey not many are. You guys didnt run off the topic and stayed on key so that was good. The hook was cool. Overall it was a nice story but just decent lyrics. Flow: The flow of your piece didnt help out my overall feel for it. Many lines were stretched and it messed up the enjoyment and smoothness of the read. Some lines didn't rhyme so perfectly like the back track and massive bar. So the flow wasnt a plus in this piece. Imagery: The imagery was very faint. Try to work on using better descriptions and metaphores in your OM's. This will help it be more enjoyable and make it stand out from the decent OM's and the great OM's. The Hook: The hook was probably my favorite part of this piece. It flowed perfectly. It had deep emotion. It was the prefect hook for the topic you did. This helped your piece alot in my mind. Emotion: The hook is what had the most emotion in your entire piece. Both of your verse's stayed on topic but didnt express the lyrical emotion that was needed to be a great piece. Imagery helps the emotion of your lyrics. So keep working on that. In my eyes this was just a so-so piece with potential to be a great. Keep working on OM's and you'll improve. Peace
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04-03-05, 06:08 AM
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IP: 6804 D41F
u really cant be serious with this piece of shit...fuck legend and fuck katrina
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04-04-05, 10:23 AM
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IP: E94B 4DDE
Thanx IL.....
X-CELL he just said this was a dope peice. Go fuck yourself and your wack ass OM's.
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