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Old 03-27-05, 01:31 PM   #1
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Im Tha NEw Kid On Tha Block And Im Here To Collect whatz mine
i shoot first talk later cause it waste less time
im no fake g i'll take on any nigga
you'll see ma gun play before u pull ya trigger
we not walkin on the beach wake up nigga this da hood
ya gurl friends got caught fuckin niggaz and got killed for good
u laugh countin ya money now cause u think its a joke
ya turned around get shot cause u stole tha wrong niggaz coke
you wake up it a nightmare in relief u stare at tha celling
you hear four shotz, touch ya self and ya hands is bleeding
you get a glimsp of his face and it look like he ready to start
you ain't laungin no u screemin cause u can feel ya heart
you look in his face and he say bitch wats up
now all u hear is screeemin cause ya baby woke up
ahe takes her little self and walks in the room
before she can see through the fog all she hears is boom
you ask for mercy so u beg and pled
he says hell no u should have neva stole ma weed.

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Old 03-27-05, 01:58 PM   #2
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Whack..No Flow..Elemtary Rhymes..Elevate Kid..Seriously..Lol
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Old 03-27-05, 02:09 PM   #3
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yo this shit terriblly weak...but i'll try ta be nice..u have potential but dont come in this thinkin ur the best i did that and i sucked majorly and looks like ur doin the same just focus and use alot of multi's and perfect flow, structure and all that
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Old 03-27-05, 02:10 PM   #4
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Elemantary as hell....so typical for a newbie drop. This is not the streets...so dont be a fake gangsta on the net. Shit won't fly wit most heads on the site. Structure was off, flow was okay I guess, but you need to get creative. Stay up, keep elevating.
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Old 03-27-05, 03:39 PM   #5
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Where's the link?.... This will be closed if you dont not post a link in the next 24 hours
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Old 03-27-05, 05:58 PM   #6
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why you duckin me hommie(young e)...
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Old 03-27-05, 08:22 PM   #7
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yo man you need to elevate a lot for real...use this site as an elevation tool....up y our vocab, learn multies, wordplay, get off all that gangsta stuff...that dont work on the net man...dont talk about stuff u dont know nothin about...and i can gaurantee you have never killed anyone or any of that shit like your talkin in this so.....just be real...come with something more real than this....
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Old 03-27-05, 09:36 PM   #8
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unless its in ur punchlines but just dont go hardcore on it where u actually are tryin ta be gangsta i tried that shit too didnt work for me
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Old 03-28-05, 04:29 PM   #9
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closed no link..
If you want this re-opened pm me the link
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