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03-27-05, 08:14 PM | #1 | ||||
Ike
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A Broken Mic.....A Broken Dream....
IP: EB8D 9EAC
i sit alone in an empty room, with a pen and a pad
persuing this seemingly pointless dream that i have this is the last time i'll try, if i dont make it this time i guess i'll resort to drugs, and crime as my grind seems like i waste my money, its why i live in the dirt every paycheck i get goes to my demos and studio work my producer tells me not to give up, my time is near but i dont believe him no more, he's said it for years i know im the dopest in this city, but nobody recognizes they hear real lyrics and snub their nose, they dispise it but anyways i'll try one more time, then its a broken dream i'll give up for good and not look back, if u know what i mean my last chance to produce a hit, im in the studio rhyming perfect flow, perfect lyrics, perfect beats, perfect timing my cd's mixed, my producers pushing it to the labels i just wanna be heard, fuck being financially stable a phone call was made, its was a dream come true Def Jam hits me up, New York's were they want me to come to they say if i wanna come, the plane ride is completely paid for damn, i'll never have to worry bout spreadin the word no more i packed my luggage, me and my producer are on our way Nashville to New York, the airport seemed like golden pathways paved we stepped foot through the port, 1st class seats for us whipped my pen out to prepare a dope freestyle to bust when i get there, there will lyrically be no stoppin me cause ill rip anyone theyve signed if they wanna get it poppin B but all of a sudden i heard the worst words spoken in my life intercom speaks "May day, May Day", shit! im goin down with this flight fuck! the planes descending, theres no way out i can see the ground clear, were about to land on a house i dont remember anything after that, i blacked out for good so now im in heaven lookin down at my funeral in the hood wishin i could have changed the world with the lyrics i wrote but i cant, im with god tied in with these spiritual ropes....... i did this in about 25 min. so i know the obvious shit that was wrong with it....just let me get some constructive criticism....and ill return the favor...
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03-27-05, 08:23 PM | #2 | ||||
Ike
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IP: EB8D 9EAC
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03-27-05, 08:27 PM | #3 | |||
Skadoosh!
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IP: 477B D81A
dope!!!
its all gud!!!! stayed on topic, the flow was gud, i was feelin it mos def!!!! i don't really get into a lot of the open mics but i was fellin this one fo sho all the way thru!!!! keep that shit up yo!!!! |
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03-27-05, 11:07 PM | #4 | ||||
Ike
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IP: EB8D 9EAC
thanks man.....uppin for more.......................
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03-28-05, 02:01 AM | #5 | |||||
in your system
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IP: 9E2F CDE8
this was actually really good man......meh, ending was a little blah....but it was good, enjoyed reading it, flow was pretty smoooth man.........fuck, fix your structure already..man.........j/m.......good drop man, keep up
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03-28-05, 04:15 PM | #6 | ||||
Ike
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IP: EB8D 9EAC
thanks for feed.......
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03-28-05, 11:03 PM | #7 | ||||
Ike
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IP: EB8D 9EAC
uppin for more............................
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03-28-05, 11:18 PM | #8 | |||||||
a.k.a prozak
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IP: CFFD F596
really really good id give it a 8/10 keep it up yo
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03-29-05, 07:46 PM | #9 | ||||
Ike
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IP: EB8D 9EAC
thanks for the feed....keep it comin...
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03-30-05, 03:56 PM | #10 | |||||||
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IP: 64A0 EA20
WOW man shit was tight flow was consitant till tha end
for 25 min was some good shit mayn,...........9/10 holla at some of my open mics if ya come across em peace CB83
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