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04-03-05, 07:48 PM
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quick spit .. check it out
IP: 20B2 DF4A
When we meet face to face what you all about? You gonna stand, be a man or gon pussy out? Because when the kid open mic, he go all-out So when battlin, am i gonna win? no doubt In a battle, ill shake you so hard, The kid reigns Have em diggin up ur body like archaeological remains The fuckin pen ink runs right through my veins My words will last forever on you like blood stains Im a pro at this shit, bitch your just a rookie Only scouts lookin for you are tryna sell cookies Everything you spit is a fucking shame Ill burn your words just like a candle flame My flow reminds niggas of a melodic phrase Your flow is like your sexuality it always sways
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04-03-05, 08:32 PM
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IP: 20B2 DF4A
leave some feedback
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04-03-05, 08:45 PM
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The story goes. Bill, B.
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IP: 606D F99A
this was decent, pretty generic, especially in the beginning...got better near the end...you got the potenialto elevate...keep at it bruh...7/10...return the favor
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04-03-05, 09:01 PM
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huh
IP: 20B2 DF4A
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yo thanks for the feedback but whats the poterialto elevate?
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04-03-05, 09:06 PM
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IP: 9E2F CDE8
he means potential. not a bad piece, nothing special, basic, but you do work hard, just elevate your vocab/wordplay. keep up
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04-03-05, 09:24 PM
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IP: 20B2 DF4A
uppin this shit again
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04-03-05, 10:22 PM
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The story goes. Bill, B.
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IP: 606D F99A
oops typo I meant "potential to" lol...Yo hit up Emerica's Finest...we got you on da elevation bruh...holla
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04-04-05, 12:30 AM
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Sorry really wasnt feeling this OM'...
you can work at it , and you'll get better dont worry.. You need to learn how to use punchlines... your structure was pretty much good , but try to use better wordplay overall this was an okay drop nothing big but keep it up hope to see another drop from you ...6/10 Ps:i needa link to an OM' you have left feed back too or this will be closed
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04-04-05, 04:18 PM
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IP: 20B2 DF4A
uppin this for some more feedback
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