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Old 04-12-05, 04:49 PM   #1
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time is of the essence

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what
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365 squares, that repetitively repeat again and again
"12" categories that show the class that each set belongs in
however during a special account, one -leaps- into the cycle
but the next round about, it dissapears as if put to denial

how
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*x* marks the spot, as it slowly creeps closer
but the numbers still ascending in chronilogical order
representing the past, present, and future tense
the intersecting lines reminding me of that special event

what
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A face and set of hands, that tell everyones destiny
whether to give birth, or simply to rest n' peace
once again, "12" catgories that have different meanings
inside, each contains 5 sub-forms, to handle the little things

how
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*Noon* is the tense in which the ringing will occur
staring at the hands, as they too, begin movign faster
AS if too read my mind, the face's heart also starts to beat
Now arriving is the ring, so i gradually leave my seat

in conclusion
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time is of the essence, and is the key to life
but can be very dangerous, and cause painful strife
It can be thwe cause of nervousness or death
It can also be the cause of one's very first breath.
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Old 04-13-05, 01:00 PM   #2
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wow, this poem is dope in so many ways, nice use of metaphors here,i liked how creative you were with your description of "time" and how you chose to portray that in your set up..great job..1
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Old 04-22-05, 01:13 AM   #3
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^^ Weerd...what she said...lol...Good shit man...Again, nice emotion, and a good metaphoric shit...I dunno what I'm talkin about cuz I usually don't rate poems, but this gets a 10/10...good shit...1
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