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05-11-05, 06:54 PM
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Struggles Between Couples ft Drama Queen
IP: AA77 16FE
Legend
Katrina when I met you, your first impression Made me feel like I was living in the heaven But it was just a moment given by god not by Katrina I’ve taken your disrespect and never showed my anima Your rejection left me scarred and it hit me hard You were laughing and that totally took me off guard I now have to fight my way away from your heart Say good bye to it cuz it was only a target for your dart I struggle to ignore you, when I’m before you I guess I bored you with what I did for you You can hang up the phone and be fine with it But on my side depression and worry is what I visit Now you are on the floor crying craving for help But I’m thinking of saying “NO”, that’s what I felt But I had to melt; right now I’d rather die I want to give you something to remember me by Chorus I see you and to forget you is definitely a struggle I wanted to bring you pleasure before I bring you trouble You’re like my balance, and without you I’ll fall and tumble Both love and hate are like struggles between couples Drama Queen A salty tear escapes her sad grayish blue eyes For she can't accept everything consisted of lies Time came for her to face the facts and see the truth Her best wasn't good enough, just wasted her youth Years of standing by his side as his closest friend Her trembling hands show they reached a bitter end No more reason to pretend that he loves no other girl This is her chance to flourish , to discover the world Breaking free from destructive cocoon called love Broadens her vision as she gazes to the sky above She reminisces of times when they laid on the grass Talking about the clouds, never knowing it would pass In her heart, there's an aching for his hands, his touch Ready to witness the beauty she ignored too much Beauty of the image staring back in the mirror Without their struggles, happiness is even nearer Chorus I see you and to forget you is definitely a struggle I wanted to bring you pleasure before I bring you trouble You’re like my balance, and without you I’ll fall and tumble Both love and hate are like struggles between couples http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2144836 Theres ya link
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05-11-05, 06:54 PM
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IP: AA77 16FE
Leave feed. I'll RTF
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05-12-05, 01:12 AM
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Odi et Amo
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IP: 3775 B372
Yup yup, favors will be returned so hit this up with some feed please
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05-12-05, 02:27 AM
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IP: D1BF FA16
very nice stuff.........
i was feelin this shizzle........ like the chorus, dopeness!!! the flow was top, structure on point vocabs was pretty decent and the whole feel was good!!! overall 7/10 hit my shit with feedback........."I Wanna Be..........." just sum random shit i did in like 5 minutes!!!! fuck a link to it, go find it lazy ass people!!! and DQ, actually leave feed, don't just read it like ya have been doin or i won't let ya bounce on my trampoline 
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05-12-05, 04:36 PM
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IP: 6208 E2AF
uppin this.... DQ up it too.
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05-13-05, 02:08 PM
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Odi et Amo
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IP: 1AD2 C386
Uppity Uppity Up Up
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05-13-05, 06:00 PM
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IP: F44A CBC3
up up..... Uppin...
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05-15-05, 07:15 AM
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Odi et Amo
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IP: 0E89 9DF2
^What he said
Favors will be returned...
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05-15-05, 08:23 AM
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IP: A7AC EBEC
this was a nice peice of work.. i liked both verses... both were very well done.. nice structure nice vocab, loved the emotion and just overall a hott collab.... 8/10 nice work ppl
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05-15-05, 08:25 AM
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Odi et Amo
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IP: 0E89 9DF2
^Thanks for feed, it's much appreciated...
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05-15-05, 09:27 AM
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IP: 4FDB 7FF2
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nice shit, good topic, nicely done , shit was a good read.... I now have to fight my way away from your heart Say good bye to it cuz it was only a target for your dart I struggle to ignore you, when I’m before you I guess I bored you with what I did for you shit i can relate to that good shit... No more reason to pretend that he loves no other girl This is her chance to flourish , to discover the world In her heart, there's an aching for his hands, his touch Ready to witness the beauty she ignored too much Beauty of the image staring back in the mirror Without their struggles, happiness is even nearer im feeling those lines, u could of made it more believeable or made a twist to the story but a nice read good drop from both... 8.0/10 rtf on my open mic its called: the beginning
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05-15-05, 08:49 PM
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IP: F72B E7D1
up up. keep the feed coming people.
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05-16-05, 06:02 PM
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IP: E883 8E46
uppin this......
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05-16-05, 07:08 PM
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The Paragraph President
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IP: 6BC9 4CDE
i like this piece long time no see yo cats ive been on rb so much after being banned but anyway good piece nice stucture good flow rhyme scheme was a little better for both of yall. vocabulary was pretty good as well and the imagery was pretty good on point.
rtf in my om Morbid Thoughts 1 its parallel
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05-16-05, 07:10 PM
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IP: E883 8E46
uppin and thanx. keep that shit coming.
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