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05-18-05, 04:51 PM | #1 | ||||||
this time, lets just pretend ur as good as me...
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Ok Im back wit da fuckin flow...
IP: 0F40 8178
ayo u know..it's ya boy ESKALAYDE doin it big...
check it. 'plain sik' when 'flyin punches' is |'hittin em hard'| wit 'abrasions' |'givin em scars'| 'cough ill spits' so niggaz is |'feelin dem sars'|,'bitin m&m's' like im |'stealin emz bars'| wit a '|untamed| dragon's breath',|unslayed| leavin flow's 'flamed wild' like |hurricanes| 'mouth |shootin beams|' 'toxic' |'pollutin' skemes|,spits'll alter visions wit |'blurry rays'| 'breathtakin aftershocks' leave u 'electrified' wit '|gaspin lungs'|,Im |harrassin tongues| 'petrified' souls 'shakin' wishin death,cuz like 'audiences' im 'clappin' fool's |actin dumb| put 'kellogs on ya head' cuz am |'hair-raisin'|,must be 'grizzly' cuz I kill |'bear' nations| a |feared creation| wit 'eerie thoughts', 'rushin mind's crossroads' wit |'deer patience'| 'breakin bars' rapidly,'chewin accurately',quickly 'eatin mc's' rhymes like |'alpha-bits'| watch u |'disapear magically'|,rabbit in a hat,'turn ya leads' n' cuz ya |'pen-pal's ta flip'| ya whatever...just some stuff I wrote..
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DAYUM!!.....................DAMN!!................ .........did I say damn? im just that gangsta... |
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05-18-05, 04:59 PM | #2 | ||||
E-Style, Bitch.
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LOL Yo, i dunno bout ya rhymes, but my old name was ''escolayde''
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05-18-05, 10:32 PM | #3 | ||||
Sam Dope
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Yo...Pretty hot...Is this Kin's alias???
Y'all got pretty much the same style... Holla |
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05-19-05, 01:52 PM | #4 | |||||||
this time, lets just pretend ur as good as me...
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IP: 928B 1485
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who's kin?...dont know him, but I aint got no alias...uppin...
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DAYUM!!.....................DAMN!!................ .........did I say damn? im just that gangsta... |
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05-19-05, 01:56 PM | #5 | ||||||
this time, lets just pretend ur as good as me...
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IP: 928B 1485
uppin... .
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DAYUM!!.....................DAMN!!................ .........did I say damn? im just that gangsta... |
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05-19-05, 02:52 PM | #6 | ||||
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[color=Green] This was a pretty good drop..
Structure was the only thing that killed it ,.. made the reader not want to read it , lines were all over the place..hard to read.. but i got through it.. You had some nice punchlines.. some were okay some were really good , and thought out.. i feel you should elevate on your structure match up your bars and not use '' blah"" everyone just write it .. with out trying to dress up a verse.. feel me ps: Drop a link or this will be closed and nice for quoting me!
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05-19-05, 02:58 PM | #7 | ||||||
this time, lets just pretend ur as good as me...
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IP: 928B 1485
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DAYUM!!.....................DAMN!!................ .........did I say damn? im just that gangsta... |
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05-19-05, 07:21 PM | #8 | ||||
Don't Even Think About It
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Pretty good shit...Had some funny lines thrown in there, fucked up structure tho, but overall, a good piece
BTW, whats with all the symbols and shit?? |
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05-24-05, 04:23 PM | #9 | ||||||
this time, lets just pretend ur as good as me...
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IP: 0F40 8178
back to the top....
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