umm i guess this is topical lol....my first attempt lol..don't betoo harsh on it....

Thinkin bout you if pleasuring, but feelin is so much more enjoyable,
Like planting seeds of love and happiness I'm preparing to resoil you,
It's cliche but roses are red, but you can't be defined in humanly words,
You're a beauty of nature like the flowers that sway and that soaring birds,
Protectin my florals and refertalizing my plants some people think that I'm crazy,
But if a weed infiltrates or a crow disturbs you my beauty then I'm 'dukin' for daisy,
Not to be violent but a flower tender cant be soft but not to hard on the petals,
It's not an easy job but I'll be there when the seed sprouts and the soil, it settles....

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this was ok. wasnt that WOW type writin poem but it's ok. first off the structure could be tightened up a lil more then what it is. some lines i feel were played through alot of poems iive read. but probably through this site, it might be nice to tis site, but the word play was very nice, had some nice qoutables in this. one of dem i do like it

[qoute]You're a beauty of nature like the flowers that sway and that soaring birds[/qoute]

^^^very nice line used.

thx i never did poetry before lol....this is a first...uppin fo mo

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ok. well you did pretty good for your first time. uppin for him.