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05-25-05, 01:54 AM
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A Reflection Of The Past
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Life Is like Weather
IP: 2029 97B3
stormy nights
thundering upon the dim street lights reminding me of gods tears colliding with earths surface forming into a flooded vast land the next day 'twas sunny like as if God had cleared everything with his own hands as if a storm was never hear the sun reflecting off the crystal clear river side which is where i cleanse my self when i need a good rinse life is like an adventure anything may happen good times and bad with some days occasionally saddened You must keep marching forward until the day you mustn't go anymore rather it's spring out or stormy and wet life goes on through each event that's met
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05-25-05, 12:29 PM
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Banned: Biting
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IP: 0086 7B47
Well, in my opinion this structure is SHITTY. but thats just opinion. but the flow was nice, i like the imagery in this piece bieng used very well not to explicit to the readers. the combination of good lines were very well put into place.
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05-25-05, 02:10 PM
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<<-Carpe Noctum->>
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For a freewrite this was dope, the structure is meant for this kind of piece. you're flow was on point and vocabulary was strong for this type of poem, you didnt fall off lyrically and kept the concept going, nice drop, good metaphor, keep dropping.1
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05-26-05, 01:17 AM
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IP: 2029 97B3
thanks upping..
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05-27-05, 12:54 AM
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IP: 2029 97B3
uppin this shizzle
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05-28-05, 07:15 PM
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~Break Bred or Play Dead~
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IP: FFBA C081
i like the constant flow and metas in this
was eazy 2 read and ones who saying the structure was wack dont understand that it was made 4 this poem duh...but overall i gave it a 7/10 *Nuff Said*
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05-30-05, 10:16 PM
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IP: 2029 97B3
word holmes thanks
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