fuck whats happenin i need a bitch slappin again
now i'm running round malls raping every manicin
everybodies panicking once i do my wack singing
i bout 2 get banned again while this track spinnin
noww i started a fuckin riot that is still unhandled
im just laying here getting krippled and trampled
bitches are always fuckin wit my big dick N' balls
i'm running slamming my head against brick walls
along the people wit the thick skulls and big balls
get the drugz in my body wit a syringe N' spoon
while i'm winking n' jacking off in an engine room
im thinking bout singin soon in the women's room
my rhymes will hit u without warnin in the mornin
as if it was global warming cuz they never boring
u'll be ignoring me dancin naked when its pouring
and now my damn face up in the Journal Sentinel
my burnin internal's unintensionable& unmentionable
and every word'll hit you hard in this instrumental
it got you feeling so fucking intensive and mental
too the fuckin point too where it's unpreventable

becuz putting out wack shit is just wrong
like me wearing a fuckin bra and thong
it just to hard to beleive ina human being
in a green G-string wearin pants & peeing
a living man-whore in person and breathin
fuck what you just heard read what u seein

i grew up before but im growing down this time
i fell down a flight of steps & cracked my spine
now im walkin like frankenstein but im doin fine
bring ur vodka and beer what....im drinkin mine
i got satellites so i could see hermanphrodytes
went 2 school 2 just start fights breakin lights
soo i went on a field trip got some spider bites
got superpowers beating on wimps n' cowards
sent 'em 2 the hospital along wit some flowers
got in the girls showers & winked with powders
every kid'll get sent 2 the muthafuckin hospital
the wackest........ Straight Aim right back at it
jackin off in the damn attic anotha crak addict
about had it ur rhymes bore us ur hoes adore us
all of yall ignore us fuck i forgot the damn chorus

becuz putting out wack shit is just wrong
like me wearing a fuckin bra and thong
it just to hard to beleive ina human being
in a green G-string wearin pants & peeing
a living man-whore in person and breathin
fuck what you just heard read what u seein

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=193866
there my link

iight not bad, structure is obviously very good, ur vocab not a problem...but see, u have to many basic lines....u gutta kick it up a notch mayne fo real.....nice piece overall but u needa enhance those rhymes.....multi's 7/10 overall 8/10 keep elevatin mayne

aight uppin a lil more

..uppin...is open mics useless these dayz or sumthin???? i'll return the fav if u give me some feed

whoa structure as even as a ---------------- man nice flow good piece elevate more dawg but flow is there now...

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flow was on point, but yo lyrics werent that strong homie. Elevate a lil more. but I see you worked on ya structure and flow, just keep workin. Nice piece. just a lil bit stronger and creative concepts.


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aight thanx for the feed